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Away

SoundSound Posts: 579
edited March 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I'm not away
i'm in
i'm always in
around
looking around
looking for you
you are more than you think you are
It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

Jim Carrol
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  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    Sometimes I'm "always in" too

    I think you could have developed the idea more, worked the poem a little more
    Originally posted by Sound
    I'm not away
    i'm in
    i'm always in
    around
    looking around
    looking for you
    you are more than you think you are
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • bambi girlbambi girl Posts: 406
    hey sound :)


    i like it....simple words....simple meaning.....


    how you doing anyway?
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    i'm good, college began

    and i didn't have much time to visit you guys here


    how are you, angel?
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • Ok2GoOk2Go Posts: 102
    have a sad friend on my hands
    maybe two the way things seem to be going
    how are the wheels on the bus turning?

    7 is sad and needs to be adopted by a family who loves him.

    let's all chip in and get him a new home.
    "and then, one Thursday, nearly two thousand years after one man had been nailed to a tree for saying how great it would be to be nice to people for a change, a girl sitting on her own in a small cafe in Rickmansworth suddenly realized what it was that had been going wrong in the world all this time, and she finally knew how the world could be made a good and happy place. This time it was right and no one had to get nailed to anything. Sadly, before she could get to a phone to tell anyone about it, a terrible stupid catastrophe occurred, and the idea was lost forever."

    Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    i got to be his big brother
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • bambi girlbambi girl Posts: 406
    Originally posted by Sound
    i'm good, college began

    and i didn't have much time to visit you guys here


    how are you, angel?


    im okay thanks.....its been so long since ive talked to you and seven, i need to catch up with both you guys so much....i have no idea how you are :(


    myself, im doing okay.





    i'll PM you both real soon.....nudge me if i forget to though.....im really forgetful :D
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