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The shortest poem I have ever written...

Astral StarAstral Star Posts: 129
edited August 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Wrapped Up
8-19-07

Hide me in a kiss
Watch my mind unwind
Like the time

Ensconce me in your lust
Hypnotic yet gentle
Like your trust

Simmer me in your embrace
Where our souls meld
Into ethereal grace
"If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
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  • Astral StarAstral Star Posts: 129
    So I'm thinking this is better suited as song. Hmmm... What chords will find me on this one!
    "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
  • gue_bariumgue_barium Posts: 5,515
    Too superficial.
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  • Astral StarAstral Star Posts: 129
    Hmm. How so? It's a new type of writing for me so please elaborate I'm always in luv with great critique!
    "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
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