just don't

Kwyjibo
Kwyjibo Posts: 662
edited July 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
don't blink
I'll be gone before your eyes open
and don't think
I'll be wrong, because I always am
don't listen
you're right anyway, remember?
don't talk
I've heard every word you've got to say
don't cry
cause that's worst of all
don't look
I'm leaving now

I may come back
but

don't hold your breath
The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
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  • anOmis
    anOmis Posts: 223
    *smiles*

    loved the sarcasm in the end...
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

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  • olderman
    olderman Posts: 1,765
    "don't talk
    i've heard every word you've got to say"

    i can relate to this ..

    and to the whole poem

    thanks!!
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • Jerram
    Jerram Posts: 41
    I liked it...you could probably make it longer too. It just feels like it has room to grow. but its really good as is...
    "I wish I were a messenger and all the news was good" - E.V.
  • tracingdaisies
    tracingdaisies Posts: 40
    Yah...I think most of us have been here, though not always put the mood into place so accurately with words. Thanks!
    I wish I was a Democrat
    One that had a chance to win
    I wish I was a Republican
    But would I be a human being?
    --from 'Wishlist,' 7/6/03, Philadelphia

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  • Spot In The Sky
    Spot In The Sky Posts: 1,175
    well said
    "The world is dangerous, feel safe here tonight..." EV 9/17/06

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