breath out a long sigh and remember me someday

Kwyjibo
Kwyjibo Posts: 662
edited July 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I sang a song and no one heard it
did I even make a sound?
the wailing sirens seem so distant
as my body hits the ground

and there you are when my eyelids close
such a surreal and perfect display
and my life flashes before my eyes
but you are all I see

"breath! God dammit! breath!"
the man is trying to say
"what did he take?!" he yells it you
but your mouth is frozen that way

and now I'm dead, but you don't cry
you don't make the slightest sound
the corners of your lips cringe into a smile
as my body hits the ground
The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
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  • Kwyjibo
    Kwyjibo Posts: 662
    I thought so.... but Im drunk with a capital d
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • jboelhow
    jboelhow Posts: 170
    Originally posted by Kwyjibo
    I thought so.... but Im drunk with a capital d

    Interesting way to express a poet's feelings... when it seems no one is feeling their words...

    Side note: I've written some interesting poems under the influence ;)
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • anOmis
    anOmis Posts: 223
    Originally posted by Kwyjibo
    I sang a song and no one heard it
    did I even make a sound?
    the wailing sirens seem so distant
    as my body hits the ground

    and there you are when my eyelids close
    such a surreal and perfect display
    and my life flashes before my eyes
    but you are all I see

    "breath! God dammit! breath!"
    the man is trying to say
    "what did he take?!" he yells it you
    but your mouth is frozen that way

    and now I'm dead, but you don't cry
    you don't make the slightest sound
    the corners of your lips cringe into a smile
    as my body hits the ground

    and then say that alcohol is bad 4 u!ha!
    great writting..

    keep them coming*cheers*
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

    F.ZAPPA

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