sad love song #193

KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
cigarette smoke
still clinging to my clothes
whiskey and vodka
still burning in my throat

temporary solutions
to a permanent problem

I crawl into bed
still wearing my clothes
a light blinking off in the distance
I'm wearing three layers
but I'm still cold

broken bottles all over the floor
picture frames shattered
from our all-out war

as I rummage through the glass
brown stained with red
I see that old picture of us
and the back of it said

"take this with you and don't forget me
it will keep you warm, and you won't miss me
I will be in your heart forever, so be quiet and kiss me"

so I wipe off the grime
and stick it in my wallet
next to a picture
that would make you cry
if you ever saw it
The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
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  • Hey, cbl, glad you bumped this. :) It IS great! It's so real and I can easily picture the scene in my head.
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    I agree BE. Well written.
  • Kwyjibo wrote:
    I see that old picture of us
    and the back of it said

    "take this with you and don't forget me
    it will keep you warm, and you won't miss me
    I will be in your heart forever, so be quiet and kiss me"

    so I wipe off the grime
    and stick it in my wallet
    next to a picture
    that would make you cry
    if you ever saw it


    i am honestly at a loss of words....quite possibly one of the greatest lines i have ever read on here.
    there'll be time for laughin'
    there's no time to cry
    soon i will be leavin'
    look me in the eye
    no matter what's in front of me
    it's your face that i'll see
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    how weird that such a great poem can go so very long without being replied to. I hope the author sees it here again. beautiful.
  • pacifier wrote:
    how weird that such a great poem can go so very long without being replied to. I hope the author sees it here again. beautiful.



    i know wow ...i really hope the auther sees it again
    so they know that i think it is PERFECT!!!BEAUTIFUL!!!
    its just so real its like iv actually been there
    dream like your living forever
    live like your dying today
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