mind fucked

KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
edited February 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
he's got this little problem
a cotton swab went too deep
consonants look like vowels
he sees demon clowns in sleep

there's a giant hole in wall of his room
it sucks him in; distorts his features
his fingers stretch and teeth pop out
he's naked and shaking, he's naked and shaking

a man with no mouth screams in his face
he can't close his eyes
because they've been taped
he can't look away, he can't look away

he wakes up from his dream.
he's on a gurney.
a blood soaked doctor is singing gospe hymnals
his stethoscope is cold, really cold.
The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    I like how you put the repeated phrases in those two last lines of the 2nd and 3rd stanza. It adds spice to life in a poem. I like this poem.
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    K...you write scary shit sometimes.no offense.good...but scary.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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