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Back Nine

bossman3188bossman3188 Posts: 263
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Not much to say,
since the rain won't go away.
10 with the sky blue,
I don't think you have a clue.
11 is a long way from here,
close my eyes and sip another beer.
12 with little effort,
you can easily make me hurt.
Blue sky or sunny day I can be here,
be there like every one else was.
13 isn't very long,
why am I always wrong.
With 14 on the horizon,
I feel I need to call you from my verizon.
15 has the fast greens,
I fell into the rough and tore my jeans.
16 and the sun setting,
we'll soon be betting.
17 and your gone,
didn't take that long.
I don't know you well,
but I'm sure we can try, sure as hell.
18 and it's over,
someone steps on a four leaf clover.
What's there to do,
why can't it be just me and you,
so we could lay down and talk for a delicate few.
That was my back nine...my last round.
Why can't you be mine...your the one I found.



Room for discussion if you like...
there'll be time for laughin'
there's no time to cry
soon i will be leavin'
look me in the eye
no matter what's in front of me
it's your face that i'll see
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Room for discussion?
    Who's it about?!!!!! :)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    Yeah, I want to know too. And what do the numbers stand for?
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    i DONT KNOW...BUT HES A VERY GOOD...CREATIVE YOUNG WRITER.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    How do you know he's young?.....Whatever, this guy has talent!
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    jam-jam...or whatever your REAL name is...dont you read people's bios?:):):)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    No, I actually do not read their bios, but now I know, I'm kind of new. :)
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Its okay...well ease you into it!!!!!
    Welcome aboard!I'm allison....:)and i was only kidding:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    Thanks Allison! I know you were kidding, but I just barely know how to use this computer and my real name IS jamjam. :):):)
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    aND MINE IS mRS.vEDDER.(wELL...NOT YET);)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    Get in line, I'm sure there's a lot of those around......:):):)
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Alot Of What Around?
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    Mrs. Vedder's (not yet...) I'm sure there's a lot of people who feel the same way you do. You do know eddie is loved by many?....
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    no hes not...hes lusted after.plus...I dont even know the man.
    but I think he's extemely attractive and I would like to get to know him.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    Get to know him..... I would like to, too. He is very attractive and endearing. I don't know him personally but I think he has a heart of gold, but I don't really know.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    well...its just all in his lyrics.He puts himself on the line.I really spend alot of time worrying about his safety sometimes.Theres alot of nutty people out there...I mean...you can joke with him all you want, but hes got a hard job.I think thats why they stay out of the limelight so much.I swear...I have so many people in my prayers.:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • bossman3188bossman3188 Posts: 263
    I was blown away by both your comments:) thank you both and god bless you. never had anyone reply to any of my writings like that before.
    there'll be time for laughin'
    there's no time to cry
    soon i will be leavin'
    look me in the eye
    no matter what's in front of me
    it's your face that i'll see
  • jamjamjamjam Posts: 491
    Well, we were blown away by what you wrote. I've never read anything else by you but I would like to. :):)
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