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R my heartstrings connected?

tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
edited January 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
a delicate wisp decided to die

oh no...
not frail...
just sleepy from all things accomplished

and so it did just that...

it died and laid down on a fuzzy nest of god-cloud
and its soul wept with hope
and lived again, reborn in hope

and as it lived it floated down through the god-cloud
back down to where real things eat real things
and it's soul knew the dread of grief

its soul knew it wanted to fly
and so it prayed for days on end for wings
and it prayed for months on end
and wept
as it slept
where real things eat real things

its object tired of its pleas
or perhaps just became available
and God spun the stone
and honed the barbs
for wings never stick unless securely fastened

its object called it to come
and it came passionately
and was held turned away
by the head
by the hand of God Himself

and God did ram deep dolly screwed spikes
with Heavenly honed expanding barbs
into each of its delicate blades

no...
not frail...
just sleepy for all its accomplishment

and its enemies giggled at the sight of blood

and several moments later

it flew
~all is full of love~
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  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    I really really like this one. I can't put my finger on why... it's just because of the story you tell and the descriptions you make. They're not concrete. They let my mind wander a bit. Not everything is spelled out.

    Where real things eat real things...

    Definitely my favorite part. Rock out.
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  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    haha....

    that line reminds me of Maurice Sendack's "Where the Wild Things Are"

    :)


    thanks
    ~all is full of love~
  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    I like it,
    Do I understand you,
    yes, I think I do.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Ah tenaciousA, our enemies just revel at the sight of our blood, don't they? But my how they back away when you wipe it from your lip and stagger towards them. :D I always like yer shit, girl!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Radar(Baba)O'RileyRadar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Woah, girl. This was, dare I say, a grand poetic sequel to Given to Fly. And yet, it stands (er, flies) wonderously on its own.
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    jes keepin it pj, j


    :)


    thanks


    and be? i dig what you say :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    jes keepin it pj, j


    :)


    thanks


    and be? i dig what you say :)

    :D You are a fine gal tA. Don't go besmirching your name by associating with the likes of me. ;)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    beschmirch me baby :o
    ~all is full of love~
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    together we shall don the cape of beschmirchment
    fly through the night
    and leave words for poets
    who's baby words have wiggled from their brains



    errr uhhhh gums...


    yeah gums...


    that's it



    we could start a whole new doll line

    the beschmirchables


    they'd be like cabbage patch kids...

    for grown ups...






    :D
    ~all is full of love~
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    beschmirch me baby :o

    :D Oh, you ARE asking for it, aren't ya! (I wish I had what it takes! :o:D)

    You are just super-duper-rifficly cool!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    careful there, mamalita

    i hear there's a strong antibeschmirchment contingency out there...


    we must save it for the bi-annual parade :):):)
    ~all is full of love~
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    finsbury, one more and that's it...


    :)


    i hope you like :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    Quite a room full of people there lol:)!
    Yes thanks for all those!
    I used to write conflicting reviews of my local pub on my city's main entertainment website. One "reviewer" called "Once-only Interloper" would say a pub was so bad you'd have to change the barrels yourself if you wanted a pint, and another "reviewer" called "Lord Swiller" would say "No, no, my boy, it's a great place!" Everyone knew it was me, of course (because my name would be at the bottom of the page if they looked!), but it was great fun nonetheless.
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