Another song...confidence growing

Jerram

....but still be honest...
I was just in this mood the other day...a total funk....


DESTINED TO RAIN

Stumbled to my heart and pulled back the covers
How did I accumulate all this clutter?

If I've got no regrets and all's been forgiven
Why does this empty house make me relive it?

Its days like this I'll savor the pain,
On days like this, its destined to rain


Chorus:
Destined to Rain
Oh what do I gain
This funk I'm in won't seem to wane
I've formed the clouds and its destined to rain


You're gone, so what, I can easily forget
I'm stuck in this rut, the long shot in this bet

Trying to snap out, I take another drink
But the clink of the ice cubes makes me rethink
That no matter how much I indulge in the shame
On days like this, all melts into rain.

Chorus:
Destined to Rain
Oh what do I gain
This funk I'm in won't seem to wane
I've formed the clouds and its destined to rain

So the evening sun sets behind the clouds
And although the rain is still pouring down
I look in the mirror and find the reflection cast
Is ready to move on and learn from the past(editorial comment-too cliche?)

But I'll settle on being the loser today
Cuz I simply can't wash out the stain

Chorus:
Destined to Rain
Oh what do I gain
This funk I'm in won't seem to wane
I've formed the clouds and its destined to rain

(repeat)

FinsburyParkCarrots

You know, what I like about this is that it is busy and clear writing at the same time. You say quite a bit and you're economical with your language. It's a good "Ahh, fuggit, I'm drinkin'" song.

Perhaps now you're (hopefully) out of the funk you might work in one or two lines of wry humour; that always adds to the mood of a boozing song.

Cheers,
Finsbury.

Jerram

tell ya what, I'll work on that and try to insert it somewhere and see how it fits...

Jerram

bump for lack of feedback...

I think you all prefer straight poetry around here and I 've been busy writing songs (not that the 2 are always distinguishable, I realize)