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this poem lacks substance and was only written for release

of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
edited May 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
love me hug me
snuggle me
touch me
talk to me
laugh with me
laugh AT me for all i care
anything to make me
forget that
i'm here in this cloud

i want to start this pain on fire
i want to rip this pain in two
i want to self destruct
i want to cry an ocean
i want to hurt you
i want to cause you pain
i want to hate you hit you
scream and yell at you
laugh AT you
and tell you what a mistake you were
anything to make me forget
i ever loved you
in the first place
"At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

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  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    it was still good

    I was wondering when you were going to post more poems, I was going through withdrawals
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    hee hee withdrawals eh?? :)
    i like you!!! :D
    <3
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    part of it reminds me of an elliott smith song called roman candle

    "I wanna hurt him
    I wanna give him pain
    I'm a roman candle
    my head is full of flames"
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • FunkeRFunkeR Posts: 105
    Your right... no substance whatsoever.

    Tisk Tisk Tisk...
    I say what I want, when I want. It's freedom of fucking speech.

    Sperm, It's in you to give.




    I used to have something to say... now I'm just a caricature of who I was... it's sad, that the one piece of me I wanted for you, is nothing but a misrepresentation of everything I am.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by FunkeR
    Your right... no substance whatsoever.

    Tisk Tisk Tisk...

    yeah i know. i should have just written it on paper and kept it to myself.

    tsk tsk tsk

    (there's no "i" in tsk)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • FunkeRFunkeR Posts: 105
    Originally posted by of_the_girl
    yeah i know. i should have just written it on paper and kept it to myself.

    tsk tsk tsk

    (there's no "i" in tsk)


    meh, I'm the one who spells team as "tiem"...
    I say what I want, when I want. It's freedom of fucking speech.

    Sperm, It's in you to give.




    I used to have something to say... now I'm just a caricature of who I was... it's sad, that the one piece of me I wanted for you, is nothing but a misrepresentation of everything I am.
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    don't worry, FunkeR showed me his penis one time... and it was tiny... the moral of the story is don't do drugs
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by Kwyjibo
    don't worry, FunkeR showed me his penis one time... and it was tiny... the moral of the story is don't do drugs
    :p God I'll miss you. *hugs you again*
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    if I'd have known I'd get this many hugs from such a lovely girl, I'd have left a long time ago ;)
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by Kwyjibo
    if I'd have known I'd get this many hugs from such a lovely girl, I'd have left a long time ago ;)

    Aw Pat. You deserve EVERY SINGLE HUG I give you. I just wish they were real ones!!

    *more hugs*
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    God Jess, this is soooooo good! You know I feel your pain baby.
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
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