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but at least there's you...

of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
edited May 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
seeing you
even if in my thoughts
keeps me afloat.

i love you.

~shortsweet~
"At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

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  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    the sweetest. :D
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by coleen
    the sweetest. :D

    thank ya! :D
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • orig_bise2postorig_bise2post Posts: 193
    really touching... very simple yet powerful.

    i love that (even if by accident) each line is just one syllable shy of becoming a haiku :D
    "Nobody is ever promised tomorrow. Increase the peace."
    ~Juan Azize
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    as we cruised across
    the Canadian border
    you reached into your handbag,
    pulled out a micro-cassette recorder,
    started quoting Tolstoy into the machine,
    i had no idea what you meant.
    i guess i'm supposed to figure these things out,
    or maybe it's supposed to be self-evident.

    but i've gone feral,
    and i don't speak the language anymore.
    we're headed deep into the forest,
    i've got the pedal to the floor.
    the engine shudders, like a dying man,
    when you reach out to grab my hand,
    you can bring out all your weapons,
    you can't make me go to war.

    long winding Canadian highways,
    innumerable evergreens.
    weather forecast on the AM radio
    says we'll be expecting highs in the low teens
    when i mouth my silent curses at you,
    you can see my breath.
    i hope the stars don't even come out tonight.
    i hope we both freeze to death.
    look at the person i've turned into, tell me,
    how do you like him now?
    no standards of any kind, no creeds to disavow
    i am right here where you want me
    do what you brought me out here for.
    you can arm me to the teeth.
    you can't make me go to war.
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Dan~ Thanks sweetie. :)

    Pat~ why does that sound familiar?
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    it was in my sig line for a while, but I think that was before I talked to you ever
    other than that I doubt you've heard it
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by Kwyjibo
    it was in my sig line for a while, but I think that was before I talked to you ever
    other than that I doubt you've heard it
    hmmm weird... it just really sounds familiar. oh well!! :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
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