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of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
edited February 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
smiling at snowflakes
and crying
at trees and
wondering why
life has to
be so damned complicated
when all she
wants to do
is live the rest of her
life as a
being of love
and sensuality
and not have to worry
about being something
she doesn't want
to be
"At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

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  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Living the rest of your life as a being of love and sensuality... sounds like the 60's. :)

    I'd recommend not using the word "life" twice in such close succession...
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  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by CranMalReign
    Living the rest of your life as a being of love and sensuality... sounds like the 60's. :)

    I'd recommend not using the word "life" twice in such close succession...

    haha... yeah, i suppose that's a good way of putting it...

    and the second thing you said, thanks ;)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by of_the_girl
    smiling at snowflakes
    and crying
    at trees and
    wondering why
    it has to
    be so damned complicated
    when all she
    wants to do
    is live the rest of her
    life as a
    being of love
    and sensuality
    and not have to worry
    about being something
    she doesn't want
    to be

    All I've done is make one teeny tiny change to line five. :)

    It's lovely, of_the_girl.

    How's your grandad?
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    All I've done is make one teeny tiny change to line five. :)

    It's lovely, of_the_girl.

    How's your grandad?

    I guess Sir Carrots took care of the "life used twice" issue I mentioned. :)
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    • 03 Pgh|Philly|PSU|Camden 1+2|Hershey
    • 04 Boston 1|Reading
    • 05 Philly
    • 06 Camden 1+2|Pgh
    • 08 Camden 1+2|Hartford|Mansfield 2
    • 09 Philly 1 [EV]|Toronto|Spectrum 1-4
    • 10 Cleveland|Buffalo
    • 11 Philly [EV]|PJ20
    • 12 Philly
    • 13 London|Pgh|Buff|Philly 1+2|Balt
    • 14 Cincy|StL
    • 16 Philly 1+2|Philly 2 [TotD]
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  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    All I've done is make one teeny tiny change to line five. :)

    It's lovely, of_the_girl.

    How's your grandad?
    Oh thanks Finsbury, I like it much better now. :)
    My grandad is working and living his life (only healthier this time) ;)

    Thank you for asking... such a great person. :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
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