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wow. this came out of nowhere.

of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
edited December 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
i'll kiss your ivory teeth and play them like piano keys
with my tongue made of sugar
and i'll be your umbrella if the tinsel rain starts to fall
just watch out for the thunder
when the lights go out

little wishes made of yellowed paper
aged and musty from the library
sent on the wind from your lover from long ago
will just as easily die when the storm rolls through
and covers you and i

tremble with me softly in the chill of the raindrops
on the concrete, on the sidewalk,
on the street where you live
and taste the tranquil sweetness
that lives within the rainclouds
on my tongue and on the corners of your lips
i'll play the sweetest songs of all
"At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

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  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    that first line is amazing :) L

    I'm drinking again
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • casper leblanccasper leblanc Posts: 1,246
    Allround wonderful poem, and at the very last moment we have a winner for best opening line of 2004.

    that is one amazingly beautiful line.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Some poems just say, "You will love me and view the printable version of me and print me off and read me over and over". This is one of those poems. :cool:
  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    wonderful poem...keep um comin
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    You rise in the morning
    Will it bring you joy?
    Or take you away..
    Look out the window
    Hear the wind cry
    Turn your sleepy eyes to me
    Come back to bed
    My arms want to surround you
    With calmness
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • Shakespeare's_sisterShakespeare's_sister Posts: 21
    Your metaphors are pretty and poetic without being too much. and that is just how I like my metaphors in the evening. The opening line could fit perfectly into one of Conor Oberst's scrapbooks... and I don't mean that as an insult.
    "And, when the doctor said I didn't have worms any more, that was the happiest day of my life."
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Shakespeare's_sister wrote:
    Your metaphors are pretty and poetic without being too much. and that is just how I like my metaphors in the evening. The opening line could fit perfectly into one of Conor Oberst's scrapbooks... and I don't mean that as an insult.

    Aw wow, of course it's not an insult. Thanks so much. :) And that's how I like my metaphors in the evening too. Mmmmm. (hee hee)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Kwyjibo wrote:
    that first line is amazing :) L

    I'm drinking again

    Awww Pat... tsk!

    But thanks about the first line sweets! :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Some poems just say, "You will love me and view the printable version of me and print me off and read me over and over". This is one of those poems. :cool:

    Oh Fins you are too kind!! :D *many hugs*
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    a poet wrote:
    wonderful poem...keep um comin


    thanks much, "a poet" :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    I think that is one of your best ones yet, and that says alot considering some of the other magical pieces that you have written.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    nailz100 wrote:
    I think that is one of your best ones yet, and that says alot considering some of the other magical pieces that you have written.


    Aww nailz thanks, you're lovely. :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
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