another rainsong

of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
she tipped back her head and opened wide
the rain fell in her mouth,
the cold wind held her tightly
and she spread her arms wide

no one can hurt me
me and god are crying together
no one can see that i'm hurting
in the raindrops
but me and god are crying together


she sat on a rock and let the puddles gather round her
little feet that sat in sandals
her hair was matted
her makeup was smudged

she loved the rain because she could hide
without being covered at all
when it rains no one can find her tears
in the midst of the heavenly moisture

no one can hurt me
me and god are crying together
no one can see that i'm hurting
in the raindrops
but me and god are crying together


she faced the other way and a brown haired boy
was walking in her direction
it was just her imagination
but he held her in the raindrops
in the cold wind
and the greyness

he held her in her mind for all time
the clouds parted
and she walked on rainbows with her dreamboy

no one can hurt me...
"At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

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Comments

  • I love poems about rain
    Don't need a raincoat, I'm already wet..
  • yerreyyerrey Posts: 183
    this is awesome..especially the line about raindrops hiding her tears..

    very ace
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    I love rain and it is raining hard in kc tonite and this poem is very beautiful.. :)
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    sad....of_the_gril....don't be sad....:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    Wow, i hate to be an asskisser, but that was beautiful from start to finish, you're a talented gal. I <3 reading your stuff. :)
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
  • bambi girlbambi girl Posts: 406
    jessie my dear, i love that so much.....i dont comment on poems too often even though i like all of what i read on here....usually because i sound dorky, so i just leave it....but, i wanted to say how much i really like this, and i love the 'no one can hurt me' parts.....so beautiful, to think when we cry, he cries too....


    <3 to you.
  • again, i'm flabbergasted (is that the right word? :p) by the response to this poem. you are all so wonderful for even reading my stuff. *shakes all of your hands*

    and pyjama... you are not asskissing. :D

    LIZI! I love you girl. :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • Originally posted by ISN
    sad....of_the_gril....don't be sad....:)

    hee hee and that was just plain precious. :) thanks ISN
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • Very beautiful of the girl, I just love how you capture emotion in words, very nicely written, kudos!
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
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