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Here me out

AmaterasuAmaterasu Posts: 317
edited September 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I'm sorry I left it rained cats and dogs that day truthfully
actually I've never seen the rain until the day I left.
But thats a good thing all good endings end that way.
Yeah yeah I'm entitled to loser status after all I did lose
you, yes I'm selfish but I'm learning to swim.
I loved you more than any God or human was allowed
to love but I couldn't love you the way love loves to
be loved. Look I know you want me to be mature about
this and I am trying but we only have one life this is it
no rehearsal no script but our own choices and you made
yours. What a joke huh what crap really all the years
waiting for you only to unwrap another cronicle. I'm head
strong and for all my wishing I wish I hadn't. So afraid of
death I forget to live. So I apologize for blowing your mind
without me there to tell you it's alright I survived before
I can survive after.
Hope you can find it in your heart to forgive me for losing
myself in you. As Cathy said to her Heathcliff "If I've done
any wrong I'm dying for it."

So long Pete Mitchell...
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Comments

  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i like the repetition in this, feels like a play on words
    and while it begs to be punctualizationated?
    i like that it isn't so much so
  • AmaterasuAmaterasu Posts: 317
    GETTING to the POINT.
  • rubyruby Posts: 103
    It sure is getting to the point...I didn't notice anything wanting with the punctuation...but I always say broken hearts have no time for punctuation anyhow. I'm glad you got to get that out, Amaterasu, and thank you for sharing something so intensely personal with us.
  • AmaterasuAmaterasu Posts: 317
    :)
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    It is a beautiful piece of work. When all is said and done and after all the pettinesses of our discord cease with us, our words, and the love therein, will stand. :)
  • AmaterasuAmaterasu Posts: 317
    Cause physicality has taken over my words as you can
    clearly see, leaving me speechless.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    Thank you for your poem. You and I haven't always seen eye to eye but I hear you and I can say your eloquence in this poem has moved several of us.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Wow. I haven't been really truly heartbroken in years. This poem brought it back full force. I can honestly say I am heartbroken right now, mainly because it's been so long since I truly have been...

    It is a beautiful heartfelt poem. I don't think I'll ever read it again.

    :)
    .........................................................................
  • rubyruby Posts: 103
    grooveamatic...that's how it made me feel too...made me remember how it felt. Then I felt a bit sad like you that's it's been so long since I felt like that...but then I remembered again how it actually felt (like someone has imbedded a piece of glass in one's heart which is slowly slicing up one's insides) so then I felt grateful that I'd forgotten. (Your brain can breath now, sorry 'bout the long sentence :). )
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