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Pain

VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
edited May 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
How could you leave me
so alone & hollow?
When you know wherever life leads you, I would gladly follow.
I love you more than my own life.
I never thought you would hurt me so much...
cause me so much pain.
You've meant so much to me,
you said you felt the same.
But you turned your back on me.
Why? What can I do?
Goddamn it! Why can't I hate you?
How will I ever get over you?
How am I supposed to mend?
How can I survive this?
God, please tell me this isn't the end.
There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
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  • anOmisanOmis Posts: 223
    that brought tears to my eyes..
    so real..i could relate..

    remember that..closing a door opens a new window.
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

    F.ZAPPA
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    Thank you so much for that. It's hard to keep it in mind sometimes.
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • SchlitzSchlitz Posts: 141
    Originally posted by VedderGirl27
    How could you leave me
    so alone & hollow?
    When you know wherever life leads you, I would gladly follow.
    I love you more than my own life.
    I never thought you would hurt me so much...
    cause me so much pain.
    You've meant so much to me,
    you said you felt the same.
    But you turned your back on me.
    Why? What can I do?
    Goddamn it! Why can't I hate you?
    How will I ever get over you?
    How am I supposed to mend?
    How can I survive this?
    God, please tell me this isn't the end.

    I know this feeling. I know the ache. Any other pain is welcomed to get rid of a hearts.
    i have to remain at top sassiness, even though my inner sass is struggling
  • Pacomc79Pacomc79 Posts: 9,404
    Been There too. Still trying to get over it. Hang in there. Try and think of a few things that you are still happy to have.
    My Girlfriend said to me..."How many guitars do you need?" and I replied...."How many pairs of shoes do you need?" She got really quiet.
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    that was very good Jamie
    heart-felt...

    :(
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • PedgePedge Posts: 71
    If that was one of your first attempts at poetry I am extremely impressed. That poem brought out all your negative emotions and I felt the pain with u. It is never the end though Jaime, your heart may be broken now but in time you will heal and discover happiness again. Never give up hope
    Why do people with closed minds always open their mouth
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    Originally posted by Pacomc79
    Been There too. Still trying to get over it. Hang in there. Try and think of a few things that you are still happy to have.
    Believe me, I'm working hard as hell to do just that. My kids are the best things in my life & are the only things keeping me going.
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    Originally posted by Pedge
    If that was one of your first attempts at poetry I am extremely impressed. That poem brought out all your negative emotions and I felt the pain with u. It is never the end though Jaime, your heart may be broken now but in time you will heal and discover happiness again. Never give up hope
    Thank you for the compliment, babe. Don't worry about me, I'll be fine. Reguarding your PM, it really did help talking to you the other day. It meant a lot to me. Of course, I always feel better after talking to you. Love ya!
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    Originally posted by Buru
    that was very good Jamie
    heart-felt...

    :(
    Thanks Marina. This was only my second attempt at poetry & I was kinda nervous about posting it. There are so many good writers on here, including you, & I feel like quite the amateur next to the rest of you.
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • yield670yield670 Posts: 19
    i relate so much to your poem.

    i absolutely love it.

    great poem.
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    Originally posted by yield670
    i relate so much to your poem.

    i absolutely love it.

    great poem.
    Thank you so much. That's very sweet. :)
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    I too have felt an ache so
    deep
    that only the deepest
    sea divers
    could touch...
    I too have felt a feeling so
    hollow
    in my chest
    after someone told me
    good-bye...
    but there's always the oranges
    and reds
    of the sunset over
    the ocean
    or the plains
    to make you see
    that life on earth
    is so full
    of worth
    and the smile of your children
    helping you
    to be happy
    is such a beautiful thing to bear
    and i'm glad
    that you have that something
    to keep you
    afloat
    in your deep abyss
    of pain
    and confusion
    :)



    your poem was heartfelt and lovely. i liked it a lot.
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • VedderGirl27VedderGirl27 Posts: 69
    Thanks Jess. That was sooooo beautiful. You're such a sweetie!
    There was a whole inside his soul a manicure couldn't fill. So he found himself a whore to love while daisies choked in the windowsill. *JK*
  • of_the_girlof_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by VedderGirl27
    Thanks Jess. That was sooooo beautiful. You're such a sweetie!

    Of course. :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    ...you hit the nail right on the head....for I too want to hate, but my heart won't let me....it is still attached to that which I loved.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
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