if i made the law

August storm

if i made the laws you could say anything you want to me!
if i made the laws maryjane would be legal and free,
if i made the laws only one on one wars you would see!
if i made the laws id reinstate the eye for an eye,
if i made the laws all child molesters would die!!!!!
if i made the laws a man could marry a man,
if i made the laws my money and yours wouldnt be in just my hands,
if i made the laws the sick would be well,
if i made the laws all of our children would eat hot meals,
if i made the laws your opinions would count,
if i made the laws i would make the greedy spend all there dollar amounts!
if i made the laws id keep the future in mind,
if i made the laws id be sensitive to all man kind!

grooveamatic

interesting idea there, August. a "conceptual poem"...with a heart! Of course, one might call it a bit "idealistic", but then, so is very much poetry! I like it.

setaside2

August, I love your work, truly.

One thing though...

An eye for an eye? isn't very sensitive.

however the part about the child molesters I completely agree with.

August storm

Originally posted by grooveamatic
interesting idea there, August. a "conceptual poem"...with a heart! Of course, one might call it a bit "idealistic", but then, so is very much poetry! I like it.

thank you this peom to me ,is more saying if i could do these things i would like to, but this is a wishful thinking peom:) thank you groove

August storm

Originally posted by setaside2
August, I love your work, truly.

One thing though...

An eye for an eye? isn't very sensitive.

however the part about the child molesters I completely agree with.

thanks setaside i appreciate that compliment, and i know that eye for an eye isnt sensative i just sometimes feel like if you knew how others felt by the things you do to them then maybe somethings you wouldnt do! but i respect you for saying that i always appreciate polite critisism, or if you even want to call it that becuase it was a very nice way to put it. thanks again.

grooveamatic

Originally posted by August storm
thank you this peom to me ,is more saying if i could do these things i would like to, but this is a wishful thinking peom:) thank you groove

your welcome

setaside2

I just wanted to clarify and make sure that you knew that my respect for your work remains undiminished.

It's important to me that you know that. Keep posting your mind and your thoughts and your heart. I respect you for it.

August storm

thank you that is so nice of you to say that i also think its important, people write what they feel, even when im not making any sense or being a little crazy it always makes me feel better to write about it. thank you setaside, thank you very much.

loveandrew-wood

if i made the law
i could be invisible and selfless
when i say
i love you all

in jesus name
ament

setaside2

anytime, August Storm, any time.

And P.S.

I do so enjoy your board name. It has this quiet power.

loveandrew-wood

ya know
ya just dont get it
i wook all morning to get this poetry room in order
and then with a couple of clicks its ruined

but not really


lets party crack open the water

its jesus day again
amen

August storm

Originally posted by setaside2
anytime, August Storm, any time.

And P.S.

I do so enjoy your board name. It has this quiet power.

i think that the things you say to me are so nice that id like to say something nice to you as well, so you are a very kind person and i wish you all the love and happiness one could have and of course.........peace

August storm

Originally posted by loveandrew-wood
ya know
ya just dont get it
i wook all morning to get this poetry room in order
and then with a couple of clicks its ruined

but not really


lets party crack open the water

its jesus day again
amen

what has ruined your order loveandrew-wood? im sorry to hear that i hope it wasnt me? if so i am sorry.