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if i made the law

August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
edited November 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
if i made the laws you could say anything you want to me!
if i made the laws maryjane would be legal and free,
if i made the laws only one on one wars you would see!
if i made the laws id reinstate the eye for an eye,
if i made the laws all child molesters would die!!!!!
if i made the laws a man could marry a man,
if i made the laws my money and yours wouldnt be in just my hands,
if i made the laws the sick would be well,
if i made the laws all of our children would eat hot meals,
if i made the laws your opinions would count,
if i made the laws i would make the greedy spend all there dollar amounts!
if i made the laws id keep the future in mind,
if i made the laws id be sensitive to all man kind!
whats good for the goose is good for the gander
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    grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    interesting idea there, August. a "conceptual poem"...with a heart! Of course, one might call it a bit "idealistic", but then, so is very much poetry! I like it.
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    setaside2setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    August, I love your work, truly.

    One thing though...

    An eye for an eye? isn't very sensitive.

    however the part about the child molesters I completely agree with.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
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    August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    Originally posted by grooveamatic
    interesting idea there, August. a "conceptual poem"...with a heart! Of course, one might call it a bit "idealistic", but then, so is very much poetry! I like it.
    thank you this peom to me ,is more saying if i could do these things i would like to, but this is a wishful thinking peom:) thank you groove
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
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    August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    Originally posted by setaside2
    August, I love your work, truly.

    One thing though...

    An eye for an eye? isn't very sensitive.

    however the part about the child molesters I completely agree with.
    thanks setaside i appreciate that compliment, and i know that eye for an eye isnt sensative i just sometimes feel like if you knew how others felt by the things you do to them then maybe somethings you wouldnt do! but i respect you for saying that i always appreciate polite critisism, or if you even want to call it that becuase it was a very nice way to put it. thanks again.
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
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    grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Originally posted by August storm
    thank you this peom to me ,is more saying if i could do these things i would like to, but this is a wishful thinking peom:) thank you groove

    your welcome :)
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    setaside2setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    I just wanted to clarify and make sure that you knew that my respect for your work remains undiminished.

    It's important to me that you know that. Keep posting your mind and your thoughts and your heart. I respect you for it.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
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    August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    thank you that is so nice of you to say that i also think its important, people write what they feel, even when im not making any sense or being a little crazy it always makes me feel better to write about it. thank you setaside, thank you very much.
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
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    loveandrew-woodloveandrew-wood Posts: 131
    if i made the law
    i could be invisible and selfless
    when i say
    i love you all

    in jesus name
    ament
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    setaside2setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    anytime, August Storm, any time.

    And P.S.

    I do so enjoy your board name. It has this quiet power.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
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    loveandrew-woodloveandrew-wood Posts: 131
    ya know
    ya just dont get it
    i wook all morning to get this poetry room in order
    and then with a couple of clicks its ruined

    but not really


    lets party crack open the water

    its jesus day again
    amen
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    August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    Originally posted by setaside2
    anytime, August Storm, any time.

    And P.S.

    I do so enjoy your board name. It has this quiet power.
    i think that the things you say to me are so nice that id like to say something nice to you as well, so you are a very kind person and i wish you all the love and happiness one could have and of course.........peace
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
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    August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    Originally posted by loveandrew-wood
    ya know
    ya just dont get it
    i wook all morning to get this poetry room in order
    and then with a couple of clicks its ruined

    but not really


    lets party crack open the water

    its jesus day again
    amen
    what has ruined your order loveandrew-wood? im sorry to hear that i hope it wasnt me? if so i am sorry.
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
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