Just Once
JesusTheTerrorist
Posts: 37
Something great. Just once?
Just once could I be as great as you?
Spill out! But be beautiful.
I want you to see, just once
See how I show you heaven
Just so you can say
I showed you something wonderful
I want you to remember,
And never ever forget
Just once when I can be great
Please just let this be the once,
One time I make perfection
Just once? Please? For you
Just once I would love to be, as amazing
As you have told me I am
Just once, I wish there were a reason,
A way to turn your words,
Your pleasing lies to truth.
I worte this maybe last year or before. I just found it and think it needs a lot of work. I've highlighted the parts I think need changed the most. Any ideas?
Just once could I be as great as you?
Spill out! But be beautiful.
I want you to see, just once
See how I show you heaven
Just so you can say
I showed you something wonderful
I want you to remember,
And never ever forget
Just once when I can be great
Please just let this be the once,
One time I make perfection
Just once? Please? For you
Just once I would love to be, as amazing
As you have told me I am
Just once, I wish there were a reason,
A way to turn your words,
Your pleasing lies to truth.
I worte this maybe last year or before. I just found it and think it needs a lot of work. I've highlighted the parts I think need changed the most. Any ideas?
"Provided there are no pre-conditions"
Originally posted by MrBrian -
"one day a country may just liberate america, what will you say then?"
Originally posted by MrBrian -
"one day a country may just liberate america, what will you say then?"
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Spill out! But be beautiful.
I want you to see,
just once
see how I show you heaven
so you can say
I showed you something wonderful
one time I make perfection
Just once.
I would love to be, as amazing
As you have told me I am
just once
I wish there were a reason,
A way to turn your words,
Your pleasing lies to truth.
The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
It could be great. Just once?
Just once, we could be great.
Evaluate us. Just once?
I want you to see, just once.
See me show you heaven,
Just so you can say
I showed you something wonderful.
I want you to remember,
And never ever forget
Just once, me being great.
Please let this be the time;
The one time I'm perfect -
Just once? Please? (For you).
Just once I would love to be,
As amazing as you say I am.
Just once, I wish your pleasing lies
Were truth - not always;
Just once.
And never ever forget
Just once when I can be great
Please just let this be the once
I think these lines could be taken out altogether.