Which PJ song translates best as a poem on a page?

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited February 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
After much thought, I have settled on this one as my answer (with my interpretation of how it should look on the page):

Rival

All my rivals will see what I have in store:
My gun.
I've been harboring fleets in this reservoir,
Red sun.
And this nation's about to explode!

Your disciples are riddled with metaphors
Well hung.
Better pony up and bring both your barrelfuls,
Not one.
As we release this unspeakable toll!

every grain of sand equals
all the stars and everyone


How's our mother to damn these contributors,
With mud?
How will the man who made chemicals difficult
Shed blood?
How's our father supposed to be told?
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    (reality...is what i've seen...)
    i had a false belief
    i thought i came here to stay
    we're all just visiting
    all just breaking like waves
    the oceans made me, but who came up with love?
    push me, pull me, or pull me out
    push me, pull me, or pull me out
    so if there were no angels, would there be no sin?
    you better stop me before i begin
    but let me say: if i behave, can you arrange a spacious hole in the ground
    somewhere nice, make it nice
    where the land meets high tide
    push me, pull me, or pull me out
    push me, pull me, or pull me out
    push me, pull me, or pull me out
    push me, pull me, or pull me out
    like a cloud dropping rain
    i'm discarding all thought
    i'll dry up, leaving puddles on the ground
    i'm like an opening band for the sun
    push me, pull me, push me, pull me
    push me, pull me, push me, pull me
    push me, pull me, push me, pull me
    i've had enough, said enough, felt enough, i'm fine
    see ya later
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    Jeremy, Alive, or Daughter

    I first became a fan of Pearl Jam when I read the lyrics to Jeremy and Alive. I thought the stories were very clear.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • the settling of my every step
    inching off of the earth
    is magnified by the things i've done
    the thing that i've become
    every lift of my hand
    coffee cup and back
    is magnified by the things i've done
    the things i've seen
    the things i've caused
    i'm a dead man walking
    the hammer that i once brung down
    now hovers over me
    casts a shadow
    a cross onto me
    the hallways are all mocking me
    what i've become
    they're all mocking me
    i'm a dead man walking
    a dead man walking
    a dead man walking
    i'm a dead man walking
    dead man walking
    dead man walking
  • Definitely "Push Me Pull Me" but that's also kind of cheating since it's really more spoken word than song to begin with. Anyway, my choice word be "Immortality". I think it reads very well as a poem.

    Vacate is the word
    Vengeance has no place so near to her
    Cannot find the comfort in this world
    Artificial tear
    Vessel stabbed, next up, volunteers?
    Vulnerable
    Wisdom can't adhere

    A truant finds home
    and a wish to hold on
    but
    there's a trapdoor in the sun
    Immortality

    As privileged as a whore
    Victims in demand for public show
    Swept out through
    the cracks beneath the door
    Holier than thou
    How?
    Surrendered, executed, anyhow
    Scrawl dissolved
    Cigar box on the floor

    A truant finds home
    and I wish to hold on too
    but saw the trapdoor in the sun.
    Immortality.

    I cannot stop
    the thought of running in the dark
    Coming up a which way sign
    All good truants must decide
    Oh, stripped and sold mom
    An auctioned forearm and whiskers in the sink
    Truants move on,
    cannot stay long

    Some die just to live
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    i like this one.. among others ;)

    know a man, his face seems pulled and tense
    like he's riding on a motorbike in the strongest winds
    so i approach with tact
    suggest that he should relax
    but he's always moving much too fast
    said he'll see me on the flipside
    on this trip he's taken for a ride
    he's been taking too much on
    there he goes with his perfectly unkept clothes
    there he goes...

    he's yet to come back
    but i've seen his picture
    it doesn't look the same up on the rack
    we go way back
    i wonder about his insides
    its like his thoughts are too big for his size
    he's been taken... where, i don't know?
    off he goes with his perfectly unkept hope
    and there he goes...

    and now i rub my eyes, for he has returned
    seems my preconceptions are what should have been burned
    for he still smiles...
    and he's still strong
    nothing's changed, but the surrounding bullshit that has grown
    and now he's home
    and we're laughing like we always did
    my same old, same old friend...

    until a quarter-to-ten
    i saw the strain creep in
    he seems distracted and i know just what is gonna happen next
    before his first step
    he's off again
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • sicnevolsicnevol Posts: 180
    I don't need anyone
    don't need no mom and dad
    Don't need no good advice
    don't need no human rights
    I got some news for you
    don't even need you too
    I got my time machine
    got my 'lectronic dream
    Sonic reducer ain't no loser
    Got a sonic reducer
    sonic reducer
    People out on the streets
    they don't know who I am
    I watch them from my room
    they are just passing by
    I'm not just anyone
    said I'm not just anyone
    I got my time machine
    my little 'lectronic dream
    Sonic reducer ain't no loser oh
    Sonic reducer
    sonic reducer ahhh
    Nothing left here
    there's not really nothing left here
    I'll be your bearer soon
    love on some cotton doom
    Things will be different
    then the sun will rise from here
    Then I'll be ten feet tall
    then you'll be nothing at all
    I got my time machine
    got my 'lectronic dream
    Sonic reducer ain't no loser oh
    Sonic reducer sonic reducer oh
    Sonic reducer sonic reducer yeah
    Sonic reducer sonic reducer sonic reducer oh
    Sonic reducer sonic reducer (x3)
    That's two things we've got, Tape and Time.
  • Good lyrics, but it's a Dead Boys song originally.
  • Indifference

    I will light the match this mornin', so I won't be alone
    watch as she lies silent, for soon light will be gone
    I will stand arms outstretched, pretend I’m free to roam
    I will make my way, through, one more day in hell...
    how much difference does it make
    how much difference does it make...
    I will hold the candle till it burns up my arm
    I’ll keep takin' punches until their will grows tired
    I will stare the sun down until my eyes go blind
    hey I won't change direction, and I won't change my mind
    how much difference does it make
    how much difference does it make..
    how much difference...
    I’ll swallow poison, until I grow immune
    I will scream my lungs out till it fills this room
    how much difference
    how much difference
    how much difference does it make
    how much difference does it make...
    - Justin

    You think the Slayer tour is out, or what?

    "Finally! I get to save the earth with deadly lasers instead of deadly slide shows." -- Al Gore.
  • pjfan020pjfan020 Posts: 426
    I think that sometimes would be an awesome poem.
    "Tonight we're just gonna play you some good old American Rock and Roll." tom petty-7-15-05
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