At the Department of Motor Vehicles

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited September 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I. In the Lobby


The sparkling teenagers moseying
Take no note of my entrance,
The twentysix year-old fogey
Who has driven for ten years
(off and on)
And is dressed nothing like them.
There is much commotion.
They are all nervous.
I try to remember
(how I must have fretted!)
But the memory is cartoonish,
Tainted by nostalgia
And happenstance years.

II. In Line

Merging into the appropriate cattle-queue,
I find myself with an older lot:
Men and women here not for tests
But for quibbling trifles,
Add-ons to noisy lives.
Their bodies
(and mine, too)
In a constant state of weight shift, from one foot
To the other, blinking, fiddling with keys,
Filling the time from here to there.
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  • This is good! Haha, I know the feeling of being treated as old when you're feeling young! :D
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    This is good! Haha, I know the feeling of being treated as old when you're feeling young! :D

    Thanks!

    Strange, isn't it, how you can be treated--in the same day--like a child many times and like an old person many times, all depending on who you see. I end up never quite knowing how old I am. :)
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Finsbury...maybe you can help me out (or anyone else who is European or Australian or anything other than American)...if I had titled this poem simply "At the DMV" would you have known what I was talking about? I'm sure you guys have an equivalent of our Department of Motor Vehicles, but it probably isn't called that. I don't particuarly like the title like it is, it's so unwieldy and cumbersome, but if I shorten it, does it make any sense to you?
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Gull, dip and cross, feed.
    Your path chronicles a reflection
    Upon the glassen sea, stitching
    Restitching wounds upon the water.
    It's depths await to snatch you.
    I shall gather stones and wait.
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  • Originally posted by grooveamatic
    Finsbury...maybe you can help me out (or anyone else who is European or Australian or anything other than American)...if I had titled this poem simply "At the DMV" would you have known what I was talking about? I'm sure you guys have an equivalent of our Department of Motor Vehicles, but it probably isn't called that. I don't particuarly like the title like it is, it's so unwieldy and cumbersome, but if I shorten it, does it make any sense to you?

    Well, that wouldn't matter.

    You could always include an explanatory footnote and it would be fine. We have a DVLA here.

    :)
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    jus call it Swansea....that's where the DVLA is based....I must admit....I didn't read this thread because of the title......here in Australia it's called the RTA......oh, boy, it's good to be in the RTA...
    (Roads and Traffic Authority).......Swansea is in Wales.....Swan Sea.....sounds so nice.....(gonna post a picture of a swan soon)....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    Well, that wouldn't matter.

    You could always include an explanatory footnote and it would be fine. We have a DVLA here.

    :)

    Thanks,

    :)
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    There are only seven different things
    That what you just said to me could mean.
    First and most apparent, you could have meant
    That in fact you do hate the opera
    And think that the art form is dead,
    Especially in the Southwest portion of France;
    Or of course you could have meant it sarcastically,
    And you really still love the opera,
    Especially in the South of France;
    Or you could have meant that you hate to travel
    And would rather walk to Kingdom-Come
    Than fly to Europe in today's air-travel industry;
    Or you could have been saying
    That terrorism scares you
    And you're not afraid to admit it;
    Or you could have meant you'll never concede
    That you were wrong about the IRA
    When you said that silly thing you said
    Six years ago at my friends Irish wake;
    Or you could have meant that death scares you
    Up a wall, especially the possibility
    Of being blown-up in a car as you turn the ignition
    While you wait for a pal to emerge from the cafe
    With your drinks and mini-sandwiches;
    Or, of course, you could have been saying
    You really do love me, and of course
    You'll go to Hawaii with me next Spring.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Nature has a slow divinity.
    It's blight and bounty bend
    Hushed with eons;
    A single leaf swoops slowly
    To join the dawdling portrait
    Beneath the blooming pews.
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  • Originally posted by grooveamatic
    There are only seven different things
    That what you just said to me could mean.
    First and most apparent, you could have meant
    That in fact you do hate the opera
    And think that the art form is dead,
    Especially in the Southwest portion of France;
    Or of course you could have meant it sarcastically,
    And you really still love the opera,
    Especially in the South of France;
    Or you could have meant that you hate to travel
    And would rather walk to Kingdom-Come
    Than fly to Europe in today's air-travel industry;
    Or you could have been saying
    That terrorism scares you
    And you're not afraid to admit it;
    Or you could have meant you'll never concede
    That you were wrong about the IRA
    When you said that silly thing you said
    Six years ago at my friends Irish wake;
    Or you could have meant that death scares you
    Up a wall, especially the possibility
    Of being blown-up in a car as you turn the ignition
    While you wait for a pal to emerge from the cafe
    With your drinks and mini-sandwiches;
    Or, of course, you could have been saying
    You really do love me, and of course
    You'll go to Hawaii with me next Spring.

    I like this one especially.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    I like this one especially.

    Why, thank you! I am quite partial to it myself. 'Tis one of my babies!
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  • Originally posted by grooveamatic
    Gull, dip and cross, feed.
    Your path chronicles a reflection
    Upon the glassen sea, stitching
    Restitching wounds upon the water.
    It's depths await to snatch you.
    I shall gather stones and wait.
    I thought I already made a comment on this one, but I was wrong. This one is written very well. Skipping stones can be so soothing.
    Chasing a trail of smoke and reason.
  • Originally posted by ExTReMe FrEAk
    I thought I already made a comment on this one, but I was wrong. This one is written very well. Skipping stones can be so soothing.

    Thank you very much.

    I must say, it is quite interesting how varied the reads of this poem are. This is the first time I'd heard the "stone-skipping" interpretation. I like it! The poem reads very nice with that interpretation in mind.
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  • Originally posted by grooveamatic
    Thank you very much.

    I must say, it is quite interesting how varied the reads of this poem are. This is the first time I'd heard the "stone-skipping" interpretation. I like it! The poem reads very nice with that interpretation in mind.
    You never intended it to be over skipping stones!?
    Now I am very impressed, you wrote that very well.
    Chasing a trail of smoke and reason.
  • I saw a woman stricken today--
    With a heart attack, most likely--
    It was at the flea market that occurs
    Every Sunday in the baseball field
    Beside my house.
    She lay there quite still,
    Her insides arguing most likely,
    And no one came running
    But one woman wearing khaki shorts,
    A daughter probably--
    Somebody's daughter--
    Who knelt to tend to her.
    (she was already dead? perhaps).
    The other market-goers stood,
    Seemingly stricken themselves,
    Stranded in place and looking on,
    Listening as the ambulance
    From not-so-far away
    Took up it's familiar and chilling cry;
    Not just a wailing, but a caution:
    You should be good.
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  • Yesterday, at the ordinary restaurant where I work
    A quite elderly woman bossed her way to my drive-through
    Window wanting food. Upon passing me her hard-lived-for
    Money, my fingers briefly scraped the tips of hers,
    And they were terrible, dead things,
    Scabrous extensions depleted of vigor or tautness
    Hardened at the end like pencil-eraser nubs.
    Whether these hands were worn heavy with worry,
    Decades of turmoil and injustice and life's folly,
    Or whether these lecherous ladyfingers had become laminate
    As the hands that doled out the beatings, ear-cuffings,
    Being the manacles that held down and slapped,
    I won't pretend to know. But like dried candybars
    They crumbled and dissolved as I put her change
    In her shrinking palm, her fingernails crunching
    Like bugs under her tires as she drove off.
    I laughed, and so did everyone else who saw it.
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