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Go Ahead and Litter

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited July 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Go ahead and litter; return things
To their sacred tortured womb.
The styrofoam, the fiberglass, the diamond rings:
The stuff of life will make it's room.

Go ahead and litter; disperse it all
Round the wiggling precious Earth.
The newspaper, the fishbone, your summer charcoal:
Let the wind and rain sort out worth.
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    I like the form of this one. I think it needs a third stanza though. The second stanza continues to repeat and illustrate the proposition made in the first, and there needs to be some hook or thematic turnaround, or even a question, to follow.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    I like the form of this one. I think it needs a third stanza though. The second stanza continues to repeat and illustrate the proposition made in the first, and there needs to be some hook or thematic turnaround, or even a question, to follow.

    hmmm...perhaps ye are right...I'll be thinking....
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  • NastNast Posts: 127
    Go ahead and litter; I do myself
    And what difference does it make?
    The 'too-lazy-to-stop-piss-filled bottles'
    Girl scouts and 4H clubs will clean up.
    The king of run on sentences...
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Nast wrote:
    Go ahead and litter; I do myself
    And what difference does it make?
    The 'too-lazy-to-stop-piss-filled bottles'
    Girl scouts and 4H clubs will clean up.

    Ha! I love it!

    I'm not gonna use it, but I love it....
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I kinda like it the way it is Groove...
    short and to the point.
    It works cause its original and thought provoking.:)
    That is...TO ME, anyway.....

    Hope you had a good 4th!!!!!
    allison
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    I kinda like it the way it is Groove...
    short and to the point.
    It works cause its original and thought provoking.:)
    That is...TO ME, anyway.....

    Hope you had a good 4th!!!!!
    allison

    Thanks Ali! Nice to see you again! I'd been around a few days and hadn't seen you...was growing concerned!

    How goes the new job?
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  • March to FuzzMarch to Fuzz Posts: 18
    Nast wrote:
    Go ahead and litter; I do myself
    And what difference does it make?
    The 'too-lazy-to-stop-piss-filled bottles'
    Girl scouts and 4H clubs will clean up.

    Outstanding!
    Work, consume, work, consume...are you free?
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