The Slow Leaving is So Fast

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
The goats in that backyard
Are slowly dying.
Their hunched backs,
The matted fur,
Their mudcovered
Sorrowed eyes

Belie the loud crushing
Screams they used to make
Mating in the dark
Under mooney wide skies.
What dreams they have now
With sleep are slow

Intangible wisps;
Slouching shadow-structures
(light playing on eyelids).
Years ago we used to get drunk
And feed them unripe apples,
Imagine them galloping across the field

Their fluffy gray hair
Billowing in the wind like capes.
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  • ah the last two stanzas are worth the price of admission - i really like the pay off.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I love it groove!Especially the part about the unripe apples!!!!!!!

    If I followed you home like they,would you keep me?;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    ah the last two stanzas are worth the price of admision - i really like the pay off.

    wow...thanks!!! I'll tell ya...I haven't been this happy w/ a poem of mine for awhile. I just love this one. I'm glad you like it too!
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    I love it groove!Especially the part about the unripe apples!!!!!!!

    If I followed you home like they,would you keep me?;)

    Thanks Ali!! Of course I would keep you if you followed me home! I'd keep you....occupied. ;)

    So, I saw that you got Philly tix. We shall have to meet up somewhere beforehand!
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Okay groovealicious.....but for now..I've got to bed.


    Send Eddie my love....:););)


    Better yet...this is for you :)



    allison:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • best poem in a long time....

    you need to get published, man....
    If going right is wrong, I don't wanna go right!
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    Okay groovealicious.....but for now..I've got to bed.


    Send Eddie my love....:););)


    Better yet...this is for you :)



    allison:)

    OK dear, have good sleeping. I'll call ya soon, although I work till midnight or so the next 6 days...so sometime next week?

    here's my love: :)
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    best poem in a long time....

    you need to get published, man....

    Why thank you, Sir Wrong.

    Published? That would be cool, but it's not something I feel the need to try. My life is totally complete right now.
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    pretty perfect poem Groover
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    ISN wrote:
    pretty perfect poem Groover


    Thanks ISNer!!
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    jus call me Cath.....every1 else does......(ISN is my nom de web)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • wow...thanks!!! I'll tell ya...I haven't been this happy w/ a poem of mine for awhile. I just love this one. I'm glad you like it too!

    well, to be honest with you - the second reading is better...because you can see the device at work - setting up the scene...and then emotion in the piece comes into play in the next to last stanza...good imagery...my biggest problem, for sure...it's the mundane that holds memories forever.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • Just fantabulous, groove! :) I really like how you made me see what you were saying.
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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