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You're Alone

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited September 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
What do I care if the cable man
Came to your house
& called you a whore?
Why should I blink my eyes
(your parents complain too much about
the state of Welfare)
If you have a troubling thought
Sweating trembling in your pale-lit
Bedroom?

I'm not you
(you wouldn't even let me brush your hair)
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  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    sorry for my french....but I fucking love this poem!!!

    WHAT AN ENDING!
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    a poet wrote:
    sorry for my french....but I fucking love this poem!!!

    WHAT AN ENDING!

    Thanks so much!!! The F word is high praise indeed! Glad you liked it!
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  • Spook FishSpook Fish Posts: 241
    I'm diggin this too. A+
    Dont take drugs and be a loser
    wear a pink shirt and go down the boozer
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Nice groove.Good to see you havent lost your touch.Been missing you around here.:)
    Nice disorganizing thoughts in this one....

    PM me soon.

    ali
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    grooveamatic wrote:
    What do I care if the cable man
    Came to your house
    & called you a whore?
    Why should I blink my eyes
    (your parents complain too much about
    the state of Welfare)
    If you have a troubling thought
    Sweating trembling in your pale-lit
    Bedroom?

    I'm not you
    (you wouldn't even let me brush your hair)

    Hot damn!!! Man, I'd never turn away a good hair brushing!!!!!! To me, that's bliss!!! :D Very cool poem, groove. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    ....it's such an angry poem....I'm not sure where it came from. I think perhaps I've got some unresolved women-resentments! I just decided to title one of the sections in my next little poetry collection "Estrogenicide." I adore women, don't get me wrong. Just dealing with some past, I guess. Glad you guys liked this one!
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    http://www.heartlessbitches.com


    look up "misogeny", and "nice guys"
    don't be one
    women don't belong on pedestals, contrary to press and popular belief
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    ps


    the poem rocks
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I do put them on pedestals, you're right. And I can't stop either. I've tried. In it's own way, even the pain of doing so is satisfying.

    Like all men, I am somewhat sick with it.

    Thanks for the comments, PN!
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    well...

    pedestals are nice. the person on it feels good for a while, and the one "below" gets to live vicariously through it. (and what better way to see up a gal's skirt?.... kidding, kidding...)

    however.

    after a while, the girl's ankles hurt from standing and the guy resents that she no longer appreciates being up there...

    it's ticky-tack, take, take back
    and destined to fail horribly

    better that all four feet be on the ground.
    equality is good stuff for everyone involved



    you're so welcome. this poem hits a note i can definitely hear :D
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    A bit different than anything I've ever read, but it's intrigueing nonetheless.
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