Fist Fight With God (An Unfinished Love Song)

sickwillie

I'm at a loss, dear
How can I put this into words?
Will I tell you what you want to hear
Or what you've already heard?

Why don't we pack up all these memories
So tight that they'll never escape

And build a better life
One that can never be tarnished by time
Let's make a legacy
Out of two mending hearts and a rhyme
I'll bring a pair of shovels
If you'll help turn the sod
And if Heaven dares to take you away from me
I'm having a fist fight with God

Cheesy, I know...

DopeBeastie

my money's on sickwillie

god never shows his face when you call him down to fight



seriously, keep after it
i like the hook
shocking and humorous at the same time

MeddleDeal

i don't think it is cheesy, it is rather beautiful at that. The last lines reminds me of new order song called, "Run Wild"..it very much could be a love song:)

I want to read more of your poems

Being Enlightened

Yeah, keep at it, sickwillie, it's got the makings of a good, fun love song. Hee Hee! I could see ya sayin', "Yo God, put up yer dukes, man!"

Ali

I love you as the sky is blue....THATS cheesy...something I would write.


(I'm quite the arguementative one)