Cloraphorm and orange juice

sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
lie on the floor with me,
listen to the songs of empethy and relation play from my ears to yours,
lie across from me,
pressed against a wall against your will........you need no pill
.......................................................................you are not ill

lie on the bed with me,
tell me how you love me & love being loved in return,
I'll stand over you,
stare into those eyes, no lies, no worries, no pain........no shame

lie next to me,
and make lonley circles on the carpet with your index finger
Die next to me,
with happy songs of hope ringing in our heads
Telling us there empathy
telling us we're dead
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  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    Originally posted by sevensins

    tell me how you love me & love being loved in return,



    with happy songs of hope ringing in our heads
    Telling us there empathy
    telling us we're dead


    seven, you've coaxed a smile from me one more time. :)
  • Originally posted by sevensins
    [lie next to me,
    and make lonley circles on the carpet with your index finger]



    Best line in the whole thing...Kudos
  • Originally posted by EvilToasterElf
    Originally posted by sevensins
    [lie next to me,
    and make lonley circles on the carpet with your index finger]





    Best line in the whole thing...Kudos

    yah thats my fav too, thanks for reading
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    it's lonely circles...


    but, there you have it


    thanks for writing this dear 7 :)
  • suedesuede Posts: 247
    okay...i can't take it anymore...your grammar is killing me
  • suedesuede Posts: 247
    ...i do like what you write, but it's hard to ignore all the incorrect spelling. maybe pay a little more attention or use spell check?
    sorry if i'm sounding like the grammar police.
    we're here to help each other...i'm just trying to help...
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I love this so much that I took some licence and made some changes.....

    die in the flour with me
    glisten with gongs of sympathy and relocation from my years to ours
    press a wall to me
    lay again against the cross against your will......you are my pill
    you're not ill

    lie in bed with me
    and tell me how you love and love and love, and returning, love me
    I'll stand with you
    on the stairs, where there's no lies, no worries, and stare into your pain, no shame

    die next to me
    as we swim through lonely ripples in the carpet with our eyes staring
    and lie beside me
    as we sing happy songs drowned out by the echoes of hope
    drumming through our heads
    telling us we are empathy
    and we're fed together
    we're dead and dying and living death in hope

    grope on the floor with me
    through our dreams of us

    (I hope you don't mind....) :)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
    Originally posted by ISN
    I love this so much that I took some licence and made some changes.....

    die in the flour with me
    glisten with gongs of sympathy and relocation from my years to ours
    press a wall to me
    lay again against the cross against your will......you are my pill
    you're not ill

    lie in bed with me
    and tell me how you love and love and love, and returning, love me
    I'll stand with you
    on the stairs, where there's no lies, no worries, and stare into your pain, no shame

    die next to me
    as we swim through lonely ripples in the carpet with our eyes staring
    and lie beside me
    as we sing happy songs drowned out by the echoes of hope
    drumming through our heads
    telling us we are empathy
    and we're fed together
    we're dead and dying and living death in hope

    grope on the floor with me
    through our dreams of us

    (I hope you don't mind....) :)

    not at all, in fact i am honored.
    and as far as spelling go's, and i've said this before, YOU WILL NEVER GET ME TO USE SPELL CHECK!!!!!!!!!!!!

    i prefure to leave the poems as written, spelling errors incuded, fuck me if i spell something I dont know how to spell
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