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Dear god

sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
edited January 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
kinda stream thing, i dunno. i needed to write, not sure who is talking here.

If love holds such fear,
then what love do you bring?
The love breed in this game,
were to love is a shame

Soul proud and true,
you once sang of all your truths
his throught broken in each line you read.

To your god I have asked,
What love do I lack?
A second thought just two steps behind.

Watch as he stares,
do you feel it in the air?
Can you feel it? Oh god its there!
Take back this time,
a clock is no friend of mine
and my empathy for you is my sin.
I'll break all the rules,
I will breakdown on the steps to your court.
and be judged by my peers, for the sins of my years.
I am ready, I am willing, take arms
I have prayed everday, for your her pain to go away.
And what? What has he given? Some pill that brings rage to the gental sage? And a knife to take my love away?
I abort all my faith, theres no body for my hate.
When you show you show you lack of care.
http://www.myspace.com/pleasetryagain

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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    seldom have I seen somebody so in touch with where they come from and who they are.....I love the way you write....it's so elemental......like thunder nad lightning....which is here now.....I think you more than make up for your fukked up spelling.....I understand your writing SO well.....I love it....keep it up....!!!!!!
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
    aww thank you, that means alot. I'm glad you like this piece, i didnt really like it as i was writting
    http://www.myspace.com/pleasetryagain

    http://www.myspace.com/alotalotbetweenus
  • markmark Posts: 21
    lounge act seems a rip off of nirvana!
    EVENFLOW MEMBER #015

    can't get much more WAAAHild than this!
  • sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
    mark wrote:
    lounge act seems a rip off of nirvana!

    no its not, nirvana wrote "lounge act"
    http://www.myspace.com/pleasetryagain

    http://www.myspace.com/alotalotbetweenus
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    you are good man
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • Pearl_Jam_NecklacePearl_Jam_Necklace Posts: 501
    sevensins wrote:
    kinda stream thing, i dunno. i needed to write, not sure who is talking here.

    If love holds such fear,
    then what love do you bring?
    The love breed in this game,
    were to love is a shame

    Soul proud and true,
    you once sang of all your truths
    his throught broken in each line you read.

    To your god I have asked,
    What love do I lack?
    A second thought just two steps behind.

    Watch as he stares,
    do you feel it in the air?
    Can you feel it? Oh god its there!
    Take back this time,
    a clock is no friend of mine
    and my empathy for you is my sin.
    I'll break all the rules,
    I will breakdown on the steps to your court.
    and be judged by my peers, for the sins of my years.
    I am ready, I am willing, take arms
    I have prayed everday, for your her pain to go away.
    And what? What has he given? Some pill that brings rage to the gental sage? And a knife to take my love away?
    I abort all my faith, theres no body for my hate.
    When you show you show you lack of care.


    wow ! this poem is like something eddie vedder would write.dont ya think? anywaysssss it is awesome .the way you put your words together.
    ...It's only after disaster that we can be resurrected...
    it's only after you've lost everything ...that you are free to do anything....(Fight Club)

    ... I'll ride the wave...where it takes me....
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