stream of thought thing

sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
edited March 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
"a play on words"
what drama is staged in this play of critic aclaim!
with no comic relief in sight
she screamed words of hatred with unparted lips
the barbs of silence at the end of her wip
My, my this diologe is supurve
but the cridics are talking, her dilivery is off

The curtain makes haste as the actors change place
now i've got the floor to speak
my monolouge is short but its langege sweet
I opened my lips to speak mind in verse
but my mouth was too dry, lights too bright for my eyes
i studder, and search for the sound
the noises you made when you swore you loved me....

The directors scipt is thrown, the curtain drops
My optertunity lost...but these seconds loose shape, and my thoughts fade to gray, a scale mesures my pain to yours.
I got love in my bed, naked for me...but she turns tail and runs,
from the sins i have done,
Mistakes i write on my face....its taken with grains of salt to open sores,
wondes dressed in the finest lace
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  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    i like this .. very true .. thank you for sharing.

    PJ Fans RULE!
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    yes, I think this is very honest, and endearing, and good!!!!! yes, and I agree with olderman......PJers are teh best.....we're so sweet and everyone's so cool......it's such a great place......I think Kat and Sea are like angels......sevensins......I liked that.....it brought up weird feelings for me, and that wasn't even the best thing about it......I hope you got rid of some 'stuff' by writing it.....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
    thank you for reading and replieing, i had a bad day yesterday and writing helped me vent
  • beautiful yet profoundly sad,
    will there be an end to the tragic division?
    I believe in the discipline of silence and could talk for hours about it. GBShaw
  • sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
    beautiful yet profoundly sad,
    will there be an end to the tragic division?
    well i dont know, its my story but it apears i'm not holding the pen. So i music wait for my happy ending, i just hope its here before the writer runs out of paper.
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