Inspired by an a**h**e

browneyedgrlbrowneyedgrl Posts: 39
Until You..

She was once.
She was happiness...
joy incarnate...hope fulfilled.
She was what she was...
the smallest yet brightest spark,
breathing in a room void of light.
She was strong and faithful...
She believed in herself.
All of this and more she was...

Until you.
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  • ...wow.
    Spatula
  • RayneRayne Posts: 99
    Aw hunny....hope this was PAST emotions and not ones you are experiencing now. Very touching.
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  • Originally posted by browneyedgrl
    Until You..

    She was once.
    She was happiness...
    joy incarnate...hope fulfilled.
    She was what she was...
    the smallest yet brightest spark,
    breathing in a room void of light.
    She was strong and faithful...
    She believed in herself.
    All of this and more she was...

    Until you.


    how about instead of feeling sorry for herself writing poems and complaining about this asshole, 'she' has some conviction and self-confidence and gets over this asshole.
  • Originally posted by Talk Show Host
    how about instead of feeling sorry for herself writing poems and complaining about this asshole, 'she' has some conviction and self-confidence and gets over this asshole.

    ooh, you're nice :rolleyes:
    Spatula
  • These are emotions from my recent past. I just ran into him yesterday though with his next victim...this just came to me after seeing him again.
  • Originally posted by browneyedgrl
    These are emotions from my recent past. I just ran into him yesterday though with his next victim...this just came to me after seeing him again.

    the poem is beautiful and speaks for itself, you don't need to defend it or justify it :)
    Spatula
  • Originally posted by Talk Show Host
    how about instead of feeling sorry for herself writing poems and complaining about this asshole, 'she' has some conviction and self-confidence and gets over this asshole.


    Good advice...
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Talk Show Host
    how about instead of feeling sorry for herself writing poems and complaining about this asshole, 'she' has some conviction and self-confidence and gets over this asshole.

    Easier said than done.

    Some people can be destroyed. It's so hard, sometimes, to get over someone so obviously wicked. Some people wield incredible power over our self esteem and emotions.

    The heart, when truly wounded, is slow to heal.

    If it were so easy, what worth would there be to love?
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  • Originally posted by CranMalReign
    Easier said than done.

    Some people can be destroyed. It's so hard, sometimes, to get over someone so obviously wicked. Some people wield incredible power over our self esteem and emotions.

    The heart, when truly wounded, is slow to heal.

    If it were so easy, what worth would there be to love?


    good point, and i definitely agree. i wasn't trying to be an asshole or anything, but i've always found the best way to get over someone is to train yourself and rid yourself of all thoughts of that person and anything related to the person. i know the longer someone dwells on the person they want to get over, the harder it gets to finally be over them. so it was rather just encouragement!
  • RayneRayne Posts: 99
    I'm pretty certain, if I may be so presumptious, that part of the reason she probably wrote the poem in the first place was to attempt to 'get over' the asshole. Poetry is a way of dealing with emotions, good and bad. You go girl, sound like you're in the right frame of mind.
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  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Rayne
    I'm pretty certain, if I may be so presumptious, that part of the reason she probably wrote the poem in the first place was to attempt to 'get over' the asshole. Poetry is a way of dealing with emotions, good and bad. You go girl, sound like you're in the right frame of mind.

    Yes indeedy. Accomplishes the double feat of making dude look like a total limpdick (thus making him less desirable and a smidge easier to get over) and setting personal goals for herself (lamenting over what she was... now she needs to work towards the goals she outlined in the poem).

    Poetry as therapy. That's what 90% of my stuff is.
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  • Originally posted by CranMalReign
    Yes indeedy. Accomplishes the double feat of making dude look like a total limpdick (thus making him less desirable and a smidge easier to get over) and setting personal goals for herself (lamenting over what she was... now she needs to work towards the goals she outlined in the poem).

    Poetry as therapy. That's what 90% of my stuff is.

    Poetry is therapy:) It also does take a while to get over people, especially if one was with that person for 8 yrs. Thanks for your opinions and advice, guys:)
  • That was really incredible. Sounds painful but it's good that you can get it into words to help you. Poetry is release, but only works when there is something real to release.
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  • i still disagree though. if you're planning on getting over the asshole, then why write poetry about them? writing about them isn't going to take your mind off them. all poetry does is conjure up the bad feelings you already have for that person, and really doesn't help much in getting over them. i know, 8 years is longer than anything i've ever been involved with, but at the same time, i've been through the heartbreak thing, and i'm no superhero, but i found as soon as i completely blocked that person out, didn't write about them, and just didn't even let the thought of them slip my mind, i felt fine again and quickly got over them.

    i mean, it's your life, not mine, but i'm just saying, i felt so much better when i completely blocked that person out of my mind. and when i wrote about them for 'release', it's obvious that it made me think of them, and didn't help at all.
  • Originally posted by Talk Show Host
    i still disagree though. if you're planning on getting over the asshole, then why write poetry about them? writing about them isn't going to take your mind off them. all poetry does is conjure up the bad feelings you already have for that person, and really doesn't help much in getting over them. i know, 8 years is longer than anything i've ever been involved with, but at the same time, i've been through the heartbreak thing, and i'm no superhero, but i found as soon as i completely blocked that person out, didn't write about them, and just didn't even let the thought of them slip my mind, i felt fine again and quickly got over them.

    i mean, it's your life, not mine, but i'm just saying, i felt so much better when i completely blocked that person out of my mind. and when i wrote about them for 'release', it's obvious that it made me think of them, and didn't help at all.

    i dunno, sometimes i feel like writing something down helps get it out of the system, though not always (i tend to store all feelings etc up inside) but sometimes writing it down does help.
    Spatula
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Talk Show Host
    i still disagree though. if you're planning on getting over the asshole, then why write poetry about them? writing about them isn't going to take your mind off them. all poetry does is conjure up the bad feelings you already have for that person, and really doesn't help much in getting over them. i know, 8 years is longer than anything i've ever been involved with, but at the same time, i've been through the heartbreak thing, and i'm no superhero, but i found as soon as i completely blocked that person out, didn't write about them, and just didn't even let the thought of them slip my mind, i felt fine again and quickly got over them.

    i mean, it's your life, not mine, but i'm just saying, i felt so much better when i completely blocked that person out of my mind. and when i wrote about them for 'release', it's obvious that it made me think of them, and didn't help at all.

    But sometimes writing is a catharsis. Sometimes it's regaining a personal identity. Especially when a couple have been together for so long, their identities start blending. And when the relationship is severed, identity needs to be recaptured. A sense of worth needs to be re-established. And coming to terms with the end of the relationship is paramount. Writing helps with all of these things.

    Now, if you write about your ex for 10 years after the breakup, then there are issues. But for a few months or so... nah.

    Everyone works differently. Slamming that door shut may work for you. I know it doesn't work for me, and never will. I can never justify slamming the door on such an influential portion of my life... especially one that probably had many positive things. It's not fair to her, and it's not fair to me. I find that I am able to deal with the fact that she was in my life, and I had these feelings, and I learned from them. I am able to keep photographs and memorabelia. Personally, I think that's a healthier way to deal with things. Accept adversity... don't run from it.

    That's just me. :)
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  • FelicityFelicity Posts: 339
    "he may be brilliant but he was never your equal and he knew it. i hesitate to use terminology that sounds Victorian...but here it is. it has to do with strength of character. the hardest thing is to be yourself. pretending to be a million others is relatively easy."

    i told my best friend, whose actor boyfriend left her, that she will heal, and i wrote the above to her. i love her so much, i don't want her to hurt anymore. but she loves him still.

    it's probably easier to think about the positive things when you have advantage. now she has nothing.

    i apologize, but i think your attitude is full of holes and full of shit. if you had felt intensely in the first place, you'd be hurting, believe me.
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Felicity
    "he may be brilliant but he was never your equal and he knew it. i hesitate to use terminology that sounds Victorian...but here it is. it has to do with strength of character. the hardest thing is to be yourself. pretending to be a million others is relatively easy."

    i told my best friend, whose actor boyfriend left her, that she will heal, and i wrote the above to her. i love her so much, i don't want her to hurt anymore. but she loves him still.

    it's probably easier to think about the positive things when you have advantage. now she has nothing.

    i apologize, but i think your attitude is full of holes and full of shit. if you had felt intensely in the first place, you'd be hurting, believe me.

    Out of curiosity... who is the "you" you're speaking to? Just thought that should be cleared up.
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  • To respond about - WHY WRITE? - there were many times in my life where, no matter what the situation, I was not able to speak to a particular person about something or clear something out, so my way of letting it out is writing about it.

    Sometimes when you block something out or pretend it's not there, it's actually worse than better for you..
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by browneyedgrl
    To respond about - WHY WRITE? - there were many times in my life where, no matter what the situation, I was not able to speak to a particular person about something or clear something out, so my way of letting it out is writing about it.

    Sometimes when you block something out or pretend it's not there, it's actually worse than better for you..

    Amen, sister!
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  • RayneRayne Posts: 99
    Originally posted by Talk Show Host
    but i found as soon as i completely blocked that person out, didn't write about them, and just didn't even let the thought of them slip my mind, i felt fine again and quickly got over them.

    Ummm...can you say, denial is not just a river in Egypt? This is called repression, a known defense device which actually inhibits the healing process. Perhaps it works for you for now, but eventually you will have to deal with those emotions if you want to live your life in any sort of healthy manner.
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  • Originally posted by CranMalReign
    Amen, sister!

    ;)
  • Originally posted by Rayne
    Ummm...can you say, denial is not just a river in Egypt? This is called repression, a known defense device which actually inhibits the healing process. Perhaps it works for you for now, but eventually you will have to deal with those emotions if you want to live your life in any sort of healthy manner.


    denial?

    alright that's complete bullshit. just because i stopped thinking about the person i wanted to get over 2 years ago doesn't mean i didn't deal with my emotions in a healthy manner. i think if it was going to eventually catch up to me, it would have by now, and it definitely hasn't. maybe i'm just fortunate in the sense that i can just let things go and have them not effect me. and yes, it's healthy to let things go! who wants to live a life complaining and dwelling on the person or thing they want to get over?

    maybe poetry is healing for her, i was just giving my two cents. but it's rather absurd for you to tell me i'm in denial, and that my way of dealing with emotions is temporary and unhealthy. i'm the most emotionally stable person i know, and i have seen so much success and happiness from how i handle problems, so that is why i was offering my advice.
  • RayneRayne Posts: 99
    You actually didn't say 'let go', which IS healthy. You said 'block out', as in deny the existance of. But I'll go ahead and assume that you meant to say let it go, in which case, that's what most of us do when we write poetry such as this. We get the emotions out of our head, onto paper, and then we can put it away, and move on from there.

    Please don't be offended, I've seen first hand the implications of blocking out events and people in ones life. It's not pretty, and due to that, I don't recommend it as a way of healing. So, perhaps somehow this method works for you, but for most of the general population, it will backfire in the end.
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    i think the poem stands well, without any details... we all know firsthand or second what's happened here...

    and it is CATHARTIC to write it down, wonderfully so

    we can't go up to this guy, the vile subconscious offender, and challenge him to a duel... it just isn't done anymore

    wouldn't even do any good to crank call the fuck...

    but writing it down
    the blame for which circumstance both parties claim

    helps


    not only the writer
    but the reader
    who just might come away knowing he or she is not alone
    It's all yellow.


  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    Originally posted by browneyedgrl
    These are emotions from my recent past. I just ran into him yesterday though with his next victim...this just came to me after seeing him again.

    oh, and once, i was out with a girl still nursing wounds cuz one of my friends left her... and we bumped in to the girl he left her for, and THAT girl just got dumped by the guy...

    he was quite the undecided romeo there for a sec....

    so prolly good that you saw him with his next "victim"

    i look forward to befriending my ex's next :)





    (i'm a sick pup, huh?:D)
    It's all yellow.


  • mulacmulac Posts: 97
    i thought this board was for people to share their poetry and get a critique on it

    not for people to judge the reasons behind why it was written or actually judge you on the content

    poetry is catharsis as is most art and creativity

    i didn't think it was that angsty as a poem

    i liked it though
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  • Originally posted by mulac
    i thought this board was for people to share their poetry and get a critique on it

    not for people to judge the reasons behind why it was written or actually judge you on the content

    poetry is catharsis as is most art and creativity

    i didn't think it was that angsty as a poem

    i liked it though

    Thank you...
  • Originally posted by mulac
    i thought this board was for people to share their poetry and get a critique on it

    not for people to judge the reasons behind why it was written or actually judge you on the content

    poetry is catharsis as is most art and creativity

    i didn't think it was that angsty as a poem

    i liked it though

    Amen, sister!
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  • why hasn't this post died out yet? who really cares?

    my advice wasn't wanted, so let's let it go....please.
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