hi.....i'm new here...so probably it will suck...

mangul
mangul Posts: 25
edited December 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
ok, i'm new here so probably this will suck, and the fact that i'm form venezuela doesn't helps alot...anyway here it goes...hope you enjoy it..

would you like me to paint your sky?
wich colours should i use?
blue, black and grey
or is it red white and carmesy?

one night painting your ceiling
i could live it like a last call
i could live it with such a damn joy
but i could never feel, like i want it to be done

so my brush starts moving
like it has a mind of it's own
my canvas starts getting shape
and i think i can see you

a mirror of thoughts
a candle of shades
the releasing of this emotion
it's been quite a dream

the end
"No, not that way, you yuppie scumbag...This way!" McCready grabs the guitar, whips it around his head like it was a woodchopper's axe and brings it crashing down in an explosion of splinter. "There, now you try it."
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  • bambi girl
    bambi girl Posts: 406
    :)


    i like it, good imagery.

    hope you post more :)

    Lizi
  • Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Radar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Originally posted by mangul
    ok, i'm new here so probably this will suck
    Being new has nothing to do with suckage.
  • Goulet
    Goulet Posts: 918
    Originally posted by Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Being new has nothing to do with suckage.

    i disagree
    i had a girlfriend once who was new to things and she started with suckage but didn't suck at suckage so i was happy

    any way
    its a good poem
    and never underestimate yourself right off the bat
    if anything tell us you're the best poet ever
    that's what i did (do)
  • mangul
    mangul Posts: 25
    hey thanx, i have some others..i'll post them sometime soon!
    "No, not that way, you yuppie scumbag...This way!" McCready grabs the guitar, whips it around his head like it was a woodchopper's axe and brings it crashing down in an explosion of splinter. "There, now you try it."
  • Stolen Pencil420
    Stolen Pencil420 Posts: 119
    Nice poem! just cause you're knew doesn't mean it's gonna suck. Have some confidence, your poems rock!
    "Trying to be a person you're not is a waste of the person you really are."- Kurt D. Cobain (R.I.P February 20, 1967- April 5, 1994, we love u Kurt)



  • Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Radar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Originally posted by Goulet
    i disagree
    i had a girlfriend once who was new to things and she started with suckage but didn't suck at suckage so i was happy
    I agree with your disagreeing
  • BhagavadGita
    BhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Originally posted by Goulet
    i disagree
    i had a girlfriend once who was new to things and she started with suckage but didn't suck at suckage so i was happy


    are you saying that when new, she sucked but even while sucking there was a certain je n'sais que about her sucking as if to say that she was good at sucking and then later became much better at sucking which made her not suck anmore

    or is it that

    she actually doesn't suck at all and acting as though she sucks is why she sucks so much?
  • of_the_girl
    of_the_girl Posts: 745
    Originally posted by BhagavadGita
    are you saying that when new, she sucked but even while sucking there was a certain je n'sais que about her sucking as if to say that she was good at sucking and then later became much better at sucking which made her not suck anmore

    or is it that

    she actually doesn't suck at all and acting as though she sucks is why she sucks so much?

    ahehe my head hurts...
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • BhagavadGita
    BhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    this sucks.

    no one is around.

    why is it when one person is gone, you are all gone.

    for me, this post is suckage to the max because really all it is is inner dialog being thrown at the pearl jam message board because i suck at spending time alone and i guess i am a total ego maniacattack and i admited that and that is ok and people like me stuart smallsville said so and i got not one christmas card fromanyoen and that is good cause they know i am green and would hatte the paper it was printed on and gee i feel like goulet. i know. and i have had two drinks and feeling absolutely nothing and im suppsing to be packing and and im trying to decide what music i want to take for three weeks and wehre are all my friends and i look like an idiot always standing alone at night inthe forumhut thing allalone. no one here thsi sucks. you are all having sex or attending the theater or having lives while i write this babble your couldn't begin to suck from a straw because it is so beyond suckable.

    no letters.
    nothing.





















































































    sigh.




























    sucking sounds
  • of_the_girl
    of_the_girl Posts: 745
    Gita... I'm here... standing in the forums too...

    you never know when there are others in the shadows...

    but don't be afraid. i'm a friendly shadow :)
    "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." --Plato

    www.myspace.com/birdinamitten
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Originally posted by mangul
    ok, i'm new here so probably this will suck, and the fact that i'm form venezuela doesn't helps alot...anyway here it goes...hope you enjoy it..

    would you like me to paint your sky?
    wich colours should i use?
    blue, black and grey
    or is it red white and carmesy?

    one night painting your ceiling
    i could live it like a last call
    i could live it with such a damn joy
    but i could never feel, like i want it to be done

    so my brush starts moving
    like it has a mind of it's own
    my canvas starts getting shape
    and i think i can see you

    a mirror of thoughts
    a candle of shades
    the releasing of this emotion
    it's been quite a dream

    the end

    I was just thinking about painting a ceiling! I think creamy shade would be just right. ;). Oh, and this doesn't suck and I hope it's not "the end" my Venezuelian friend! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Sound
    Sound Posts: 579
    I told you they would love it amigo
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • Goulet
    Goulet Posts: 918
    Originally posted by BhagavadGita
    are you saying that when new, she sucked but even while sucking there was a certain je n'sais que about her sucking as if to say that she was good at sucking and then later became much better at sucking which made her not suck anmore

    or is it that

    she actually doesn't suck at all and acting as though she sucks is why she sucks so much?

    its the first one
    i think she got bored of sucking
    but i never did
    wait...are we still talking about sucking at suckage
    or are we talking about
    suckage that sucks when sucked and the sucking that goes on behind curtain number 1
  • BhagavadGita
    BhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Originally posted by Goulet
    its the first one
    i think she got bored of sucking
    but i never did
    wait...are we still talking about sucking at suckage
    or are we talking about
    suckage that sucks when sucked and the sucking that goes on behind curtain number 1

    goulet you are adorable at sucking and being sucked.

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