My Ocean

anaranaeanaranae Posts: 23
Mysteriously floating
Around in my head
You leave for the shore
A moment I dread
The waves on the beach
In rythym with my heart
I just started swimming
No stop and no start
The salt of my tears
Fell to the ocean floor
You left my lifeless body
Naked on your shore
Like a mermaid who cannot
Be with the human man
I dreamed I was with you
and with my legs I ran
The fog of the morning
Soon shattered my dream
Reality soon showed me
Things are not as they seem
You are now gone
And I am alone on the beach
Nowhere in sight
And forever out of reach
The universe is shaped exactly like the earth if you go
straight long enough you'll end up where you were.
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  • anOmisanOmis Posts: 223
    Originally posted by anaranae
    Mysteriously floating
    Around in my head
    You leave for the shore
    A moment I dread
    The waves on the beach
    In rythym with my heart
    I just started swimming
    No stop and no start
    The salt of my tears
    Fell to the ocean floor
    You left my lifeless body
    Naked on your shore
    Like a mermaid who cannot
    Be with the human man
    I dreamed I was with you
    and with my legs I ran
    The fog of the morning
    Soon shattered my dream
    Reality soon showed me
    Things are not as they seem
    You are now gone
    And I am alone on the beach
    Nowhere in sight
    And forever out of reach

    OWOW.
    really smOOth poem ana.
    sad but beutiful..atmosperical, fresh...
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

    F.ZAPPA
  • anaranaeanaranae Posts: 23
    thanks sweets!
    The universe is shaped exactly like the earth if you go
    straight long enough you'll end up where you were.
  • brother123brother123 Posts: 792
    that is one of the best works i have seen. You have a great writing style. Descriptive yet subtle...

    very nice.
  • anaranaeanaranae Posts: 23
    Originally posted by brother123
    that is one of the best works i have seen. You have a great writing style. Descriptive yet subtle...

    very nice.


    :D
    The universe is shaped exactly like the earth if you go
    straight long enough you'll end up where you were.
  • DickDaleDickDale Posts: 11
    lovely girlie-

    very simple, yet it paints such complex distress.
    this space available.
  • FunkeRFunkeR Posts: 105
    I wish I could rhyme.
    I say what I want, when I want. It's freedom of fucking speech.

    Sperm, It's in you to give.




    I used to have something to say... now I'm just a caricature of who I was... it's sad, that the one piece of me I wanted for you, is nothing but a misrepresentation of everything I am.
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