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break up

Hendrix83Hendrix83 Posts: 26
edited October 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
a love so strong we couldnt hold on,
now your gone its hard to go on,
the days are lonely and the nights are long,
if only i had seen were it went wrong.

a tear in her eye as she walked out the door,
please dont go i drop to the floor,
i need you now even more,
its to late you say its not like before.

empty and lonley is how i feel,
trying to swallow my only meal,
i hate myself for the sad ending,
if you see me happy know that im only pretending.

the end.


let me know what you think. thanx Brent
well i woke up thismornen and i got myself a beer,
the futures uncertain and the end is always near.
jim morrison
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  • setaside2setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Hey man, I'm sorry to hear about the break up. I'm going through the divorce thing right now myself, so I understand what you have to say here.

    Get into the sunlight and bask for a bit. It always makes anyone feel better. After that, it's only the future, right? Right?

    luck,

    seta
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • keven 33keven 33 Posts: 259
    the radio laughs o sensitive one
    the seconds haunt me till
    death we already parted
    convicted
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    get a massage. a good massage. the deep kind.....

    swedish style

    hurts til you cry but gets the poison out quicker.

    we feel your pain in your words, healthy you sound, yes you do,

    still ok to cry though.
  • PearljamMegPearljamMeg Posts: 7
    First, I am really sorry... For every ending there is a new beging, and though now it may be very hard to imagine there being something to look forward to, I promise someday you won't need to pretend.
    Second, your poem is really good. If you are anything like myself I need something emotional to inspire me to write....

    Keep your chin up!
    I wish I was the verb to trust, and never let you down...
  • Hendrix83Hendrix83 Posts: 26
    thankyou lovely pearljam people. im am sad but life goes on ill get over it just need some time.
    well i woke up thismornen and i got myself a beer,
    the futures uncertain and the end is always near.
    jim morrison
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    The wailing of broken hearts is the doorway to God - Rumi
  • keven 33keven 33 Posts: 259
    hope this poem makes you feel better

    i pull up the spandex for one more show
    got a can of hair spray
    and some songs of the fake needle
    im gonna dance like a turkey
    on football day
    and be thankful that im still alive
    and able to pray
    convicted
  • FancyFacadeFancyFacade Posts: 330
    that's true Gita..

    isnt this that song that was on giventowail.com? acoustic? hope everythings ok..good song
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