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Hollow

Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
edited January 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
You were a breath of fresh air
Now, I can't breathe
I'm gonna show you
A women can be tough

My edges are rough
Inside lies an eggshell
It breaks with every step you come near
It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
but memories...they eat me
I've seen it all before,...
bring it on cause I'm no victim.
-Ghost
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    a poet wrote:
    You were a breath of fresh air
    Now, I can't breathe
    I'm gonna show you
    A women can be tough

    My edges are rough
    Inside lies an eggshell
    It breaks with every step you come near
    eggshells and broken twigs
    in a heap
    blooming roses
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Very 'hard' poem,poet.Nicely done in my eyes.I like walking on eggshells.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I am now fully on guard for tough women. Very convincing, brutal poem.
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  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    Thats about a friend of mine who took my heart and threw it out the window, but I'm still longing for their friendship
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
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