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Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
People say,
loves unkind.
It's only out of tune.
You just need to fix your guitar.
It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
but memories...they eat me
I've seen it all before,...
bring it on cause I'm no victim.
-Ghost
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    A classic poem well written....
    and...
    easily quotable:)

    ciao!
    alllison
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    A classic poem well written....
    and...
    easily quotable:)

    ciao!
    alllison

    agreed!

    great one poet...also, you have my fav. PJ sig...what awesome lyrics!
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  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    Is it the coming of Bhudhist rock and roll?
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    All metaphors have a syntax and this piece doesn't quite work for me, just yet. The poem needs to metaphorise love as a guitar earlier in the poem otherwise there's a logical gap between "out of tune" love and a guitar that needs fixing: there's no proper contingency. We might know what you mean but that's because we rearrange the literal and figurative senses of the poem ourselves. We sort of rewrite the poem in our heads to get the metaphor, whereas the metaphor should really be done for us.

    A little tweaking and it'll be okay.
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