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Traces

Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Footsteps leave traces
of their work
around the floor of this
rocking chair.
In this old house,
raw emotions
seem so fragile,
only to be transformed
into the sound of this rocking chair,
measuring the shifting of wood,
burrowed in silence,

older than
any memory
that I will have,
like the dust
that remains.
It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
but memories...they eat me
I've seen it all before,...
bring it on cause I'm no victim.
-Ghost
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    I like this one. It's a real poem. It discusses and captures the thought of how images are indexes of human emotion.
  • burtschipsburtschips Posts: 734
    yes and it makes me wonder.
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  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
    I like the depth of this one. Particularly this phrase:

    raw emotions
    seem so fragile,
    only to be transformed
    into the sound of this rocking chair,
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Like the dust that remains.....


    A perfect ending.
    We are all really dust,arent we?;)

    I liked it poet!
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    Yes, I like this poem, too.
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  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    I dont have a soul...mine blew in the wind
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • kdpjamkdpjam Posts: 2,303
    very nice*
    lay down all thoughts; surrender to the void
    ~it is shining it is shining~
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