a companion in the abstract

yerreyyerrey Posts: 183
loneliness tells me to succumb
waiting only brings more pain
so i drift into hypotheticals
that brings me joy...the world and how it was supposed to be
a world of compromise
a world of a breathing cadaver

loneliness takes me on a walk
having the streets all to myself
where i'm the focus of the street lights' attention
acknowledging me with their green lights
making me feel wanted
keeping me from being alone
without a companion made from the same flesh
but where there is a reason for continuing my footsteps
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Comments

  • PrettyNoosePrettyNoose Posts: 146
    great writing overall
    very effective imagery, nice flow.
    i liked the line "so i drift into hypotheticals"
    her life was saved by Rock 'n' Roll
  • yerreyyerrey Posts: 183
    thanks
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    it is good
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
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