another batch of ramblings

yerreyyerrey Posts: 183
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
it's part two
of a maze i'm already familiar with
but yet still stuck in

planes with their lights
try to spot those lost
i flag them down here
but they seem to have others in mind
and i don't blame them
for i have nothing of value
or that's what she said
and i don't blame her either

cavities don't occur only in the mouth
yet mine wasn't caused by a rush of sugar
it was blows from the day i was born
by that age-old dilemma
looking for that other half to protect me
to protect me from places unkind
by just telling me that i make her complete
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Originally posted by yerrey


    cavities don't occur only in the mouth
    yet mine wasn't caused by a rush of sugar
    it was blows from the day i was born
    by that age-old dilemma
    looking for that other half to protect me
    to protect me from places unkind
    by just telling me that i make her complete


    I like this last stanza here. Syntax is cool.
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  • yerreyyerrey Posts: 183
    thanks
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