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myblood2

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Have you ever had a story to tell?
That you didn’t know how, you didn’t know well
You ask yourself, how do I sell
Myself to you with these stories withheld

What you have to say might not mean a thing
What I have to say might not do a thing
It’s just a wish for the opportunity
To express yourself, myself, don’t you see?

Whatever you think and whatever you read
Opens the doors for discussion to breed
Because what you might think and what you might read
Might just depend on the life that you lead

Don’t think education starts with a degree
Everyday is a lesson, we wake and we learn
So don’t be afraid to say what you think
Just mean what you say, and voice all you yearn

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Matt Grantham

EvilToasterElf

heh, I can see Ice-T spouting this out on ABC before that "The More You Know" slogan shot across the screen

No offence, the meter is great, you clearly have control of the language but it just comes off a little too after school special - maybe I'm being overly critical so you can just respond with a fuckoff and go bash some of my stuff and we'll call it a day

myblood2

not at all. i appreciate your comments...tis the idea atleast.


inspired in part by someone on this board..have no idea who now but it was awhile ago.

i personally dont like the last two lines....could be better said...i think the idea is there atleast.

everyone has an opion and the right to express it

EvilToasterElf

I personally have had a lot of trouble getting my rhyme to do anything but sound pretty

coleen

just my opinion but the idea is a positive one and i believe that the rhythm of the rhyme enhances that end.

a wise and insightful poetry hut allstar once told me that rhyming poetry is a difficult task to undertake and there aren't many who can have any success at it. anytime i rhyme a poem it tends toward a sing songy cadence.

imho - in this case, you've done a fine job.