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Passage Of Rain

NMyTreeNMyTree Posts: 2,374
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
One of mine.






Passage Of Rain


rain begins in dark, bloated clouds..........
the weight too much to bear, unleashed to earth; given birth

immune to discriminate.......rain shares it's love
oblivious to hate......... the world it feeds

splashing on the peaks of the mountains......
.......each drop spreads it's wings......to reach and touch all living things

desperate to touch all who need.....all who drink
......to quench the thirst .......to sow the seed

parched and wilted our children absorb all the love we feed......
......never a drop is wasted on those who need

once separated at birth, each drop gathers......together

...........to become one


.......... in a pool


...........a final resting place


...........to calm the thirst............with the love it feeds



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  • edeneden Posts: 407
    NMyTree wrote:
    One of mine.






    Passage Of Rain


    rain begins in dark, bloated clouds..........
    the weight too much to bear, unleashed to earth; given birth

    immune to discriminate.......rain shares it's love
    oblivious to hate......... the world it feeds

    splashing on the peaks of the mountains......
    .......each drop spreads it's wings......to reach and touch all living things

    desperate to touch all who need.....all who drink
    ......to quench the thirst .......to sow the seed

    parched and wilted our children absorb all the love we feed......
    ......never a drop is wasted on those who need

    once separated at birth, each drop gathers......together

    ...........to become one


    .......... in a pool


    ...........a final resting place


    ...........to calm the thirst............with the love it feeds



    Copyright © 2004 TjM

    Thats really well written, beautiful ..
    and thought provoking NMT, thank you :)
  • velvet I sitevelvet I site Posts: 192
    i'm a fan, and i like the breakdown of the punctuation and form.. always a personal preference of mine.

    2004.. you're hiding more?
    change begins with discontent.
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    NMyTree.....I thought that was simply beautiful.....(once in an effort to lie, I said 'simply' and 'for the simple reason' about four times, which I guess must have given me away, so I'm always worried about using that word)......but it's really beautiful, and I like its shape......:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • NMyTreeNMyTree Posts: 2,374
    Thank you for the kind words.

    I'm happy you folks enjoyed it.



    velvet I site, yes, I have more.
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