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The Invisible Hand

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited September 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Guiding
Leading
You hold it
You trust it
Then one day
You question it
And it lets you go
And pushes you away
And you feel utterly alone
And you realize, you always were
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    you really know how to get down to the core of things - i adore that about your writing. it is so honest and unapologizing.

    you are always one of my favorites.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    You make me feel sparkley! Thank-you! :)


    And it's been a long time since you've been SPANKED, you must be able to sit down, finally! :D

    I'll have to change that immediately!

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    You have brightened many a day with your kindness, my friend and I love you for it! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    first {{BE}} i'd like to say how much i enjoy the "d" sounds in echoing guid/lead/hold and also the interplay of long vowel sounds, which lend a deep and somber tone to this piece. Coleen commented on yr honesty, Yes. A kind of instinctual honesty reflected in the long "sinking" feel of the words. Simplicity there, but heaviness.
    (as later, too, with 'day' 'go' 'away' 'alone'...and nice rhymes as well....)

    although working through a form of loss, loss of belief (questioning) and feelings of abandonment, perhaps, the tender contemplations of sadness (i feel,maybe just what i bring to the poem?)...personally i could so put "God" invisibly on the top line..yep Invisibly (what people call God) and that would be cool
    invisible slant rhyme with guiding....

    and personally, questing, the disillusionment, the trust confused-misplaced....
    feeling alone....but the paradox of hope i see visually in the piece, is the expansion of the lines....
    so even though there is aloneness, there is word-comfort, a new internal identity forming....
    Also, coming from an Enlightened Being, i might suppose...:)
    that the realization in the poem
    is not necessarily one of sadness,
    but of the necessity
    for self-trust
    self-creation
    the tenderness of guiding yrself from within....
    the invisible hand of yr very own heart-mind...
    the place (where today anyway, i believe...but change my mind!)
    where the "god" essence lives....
    and i like to think of the indwelling and diffused particles and we are total invisible body....
    but hey WOW not to get heavy this morning,....hhahah LOVE
    and
    on that theme, too, i see the lines expanding, like in Hindi concept of Maya, and the forms which were made....from One
    (again the invisible Hand (=one syllable) or God (=one syllable)
    breaking itself/himself into multiple forms....

    and coolly, too, the close line is 9 syllables,
    which is often the number of wholeness, and completion.
    ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh {SEE the paradox of yr own optimism...or mine....!)
    lovelovelove
    psps i think the "pushing" away comes when we put too much faith in externals like religion/society, even relationships. So much of the world, even the invisible world is just a mirror of our self-creation and perception...
    ok that's abstract, i know. so let's just party...giggles, morelove
    oh i got it, on an en-Lighter note: the invisible hand: that SPANKS :)
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    The paradox of my SPANKALICIOUS heart-mind, cassia! :)

    Always happy to see you and I'm trying to live the sweet-light! ;)

    ps. Thanks for "shining your love light on me" c and I'm beaming mine straight back at ya! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    it wouldn't be a day if you weren't beaming that light

    thats part of the reason we all love you so much. :)
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    you are Beaming Enlightened

    ~~~~

    and so much fun !!
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    You two c's sure know how to make a girl feel like sunshine on a cloudy day! :D

    I can't thank y'all enough, except to say, thank y'all with all me wittle heart! :) So nice!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Radar(Baba)O'RileyRadar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Invisible,
    but still felt
    SPANK
    and still svelte
    SPANK
    and still leaves welts
    ps,
    SPANK
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by Being Enlightened
    Guiding
    Leading
    You hold it
    You trust it
    Then one day
    You question it
    And it lets you go
    And pushes you away
    And you feel utterly alone
    And you realize, you always were

    I like the way the look of the poem typographically slopes down from broken, tentative little phrases, a word, then three words, then more: it suggests by its very form that, as the nature of your love finds power to articulate itself, so does the expression of divide and hopelessness. The longest line, the full articulation of understanding, is the realization of folly and isolation...as if the truly formulated concept of love can only come in its demise. Very touching, concise, and clever for all its accessibility.

    :)
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Originally posted by Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Invisible,
    but still felt
    SPANK
    and still svelte
    SPANK
    and still leaves welts
    ps,
    SPANK

    Ouch! :D

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    and thank you!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    I like the way the look of the poem typographically slopes down from broken, tentative little phrases, a word, then three words, then more: it suggests by its very form that, as the nature of your love finds power to articulate itself, so does the expression of divide and hopelessness. The longest line, the full articulation of understanding, is the realization of folly and isolation...as if the truly formulated concept of love can only come in its demise. Very touching, concise, and clever for all its accessibility.

    :)

    Thank you, crunch n' munch! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Radar(Baba)O'RileyRadar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Float like a butterfly,
    sting like a SPANK
  • ExodusExodus Posts: 212
    Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    I like the way the look of the poem typographically slopes down from broken, tentative little phrases, a word, then three words, then more: it suggests by its very form that, as the nature of your love finds power to articulate itself, so does the expression of divide and hopelessness. The longest line, the full articulation of understanding, is the realization of folly and isolation...as if the truly formulated concept of love can only come in its demise. Very touching, concise, and clever for all its accessibility.

    :)

    i liked this piece a lot....
    only i thought that the shape it took could be like..when your realize the truth and that there is more to things...your world expands...like the lines getting longer,
    Between the conception and the creation

    Between the emotion and the response

    Falls the shadow.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Radar(Baba)O'Riley wrote:
    Float like a butterfly,
    sting like a SPANK

    I always preferred:

    Float like a butterfly,
    SPANK like BE

    Tee Hee! Too funny!

    *waves to her old friends*

    :)

    You never know--sometimes, they seem to notice me. :p LOL!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Holey GhostHoley Ghost Posts: 744
    now what can I do
    to get a SPANK from a BE

    ohhhh, I know
    just be me

    my DirtySweet self
    will get a spank, for this lust elf ;)

    from that Ivisible Hand
    like a 20 ft wave
    crashing into the waiting sand
    Create Good Things........
    Graduate of the School for Sexual Gifted....magna cum loads
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i'll see your 20
    and raise you 50


    my dear girl... i can't believe i never saw this one...

    goddamn, it's GOOOD


    love love love it



    many hugs,
    Rachel
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    PastaNazi wrote:
    i'll see your 20
    and raise you 50


    my dear girl... i can't believe i never saw this one...

    goddamn, it's GOOOD


    love love love it



    many hugs,
    Rachel


    yes, those few words said a lot...I loved it
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • Pearl_Jam_NecklacePearl_Jam_Necklace Posts: 501
    so beautiful alli ..
    ...It's only after disaster that we can be resurrected...
    it's only after you've lost everything ...that you are free to do anything....(Fight Club)

    ... I'll ride the wave...where it takes me....
  • civ_eng_girlciv_eng_girl Posts: 2,001
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Guiding
    Leading
    You hold it
    You trust it
    Then one day
    You question it
    And it lets you go
    And pushes you away
    And you feel utterly alone
    And you realize, you always were

    BE!! not only do your poems sound great, but they look great too!!! :D:D

    Is there nothing you can't do??? :p

    *mwah!*
    ~~*~~ ...i surfaced and all of my being was enlightend... ~~*~~
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Holey Ghost wrote:
    now what can I do
    to get a SPANK from a BE

    ohhhh, I know
    just be me

    my DirtySweet self
    will get a spank, for this lust elf ;)

    from that Ivisible Hand
    like a 20 ft wave
    crashing into the waiting sand

    Mmm, you know it, just be you and for you, my DirtySweet baby....

    SPANK!

    ;):D Hope yer arse is a nice rosy shade now!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    PastaNazi wrote:
    i'll see your 20
    and raise you 50


    my dear girl... i can't believe i never saw this one...

    goddamn, it's GOOOD


    love love love it



    many hugs,
    Rachel

    Gawdamn! What's wrong with you, girl??? :p;) Hee Hee! Thanks, sweetie! BIG HUGS fer you too, {{{{{{{Rachel}}}}}}! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    depopulationINC wrote:
    yes, those few words said a lot...I loved it

    depop!!!! Where have you been, Mr. Brightside?? ;):) Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my words.
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Pearl_Jam_Necklace wrote:
    so beautiful alli ..

    :) Danka, darlin'! Glad you liked! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    civ_eng_girl wrote:
    BE!! not only do your poems sound great, but they look great too!!! :D:D

    Is there nothing you can't do??? :p

    *mwah!*

    :p Why a thank you, civvy! :D *blushes* :)

    Hmm, well, we know I can bend over backwards, I can lick my own...uhhhh, wait....too much information! Ppppttthhhhhh!!!!!! :p:p:D Hee Hee Hee Hee Hee! :D

    Nope, nothing I can't do! I'm like the little engine that could! :D

    *mmmwaaahhh back atcha* :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Pearl_Jam_NecklacePearl_Jam_Necklace Posts: 501
    oh i love this one alli..beautiful...
    ...It's only after disaster that we can be resurrected...
    it's only after you've lost everything ...that you are free to do anything....(Fight Club)

    ... I'll ride the wave...where it takes me....
  • Holey GhostHoley Ghost Posts: 744
    Quote:
    Originally Posted by Holey Ghost
    now what can I do
    to get a SPANK from a BE

    ohhhh, I know
    just be me

    my DirtySweet self
    will get a spank, for this lust elf

    from that Ivisible Hand
    like a 20 ft wave
    crashing into the waiting sand
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Mmm, you know it, just be you and for you, my DirtySweet baby....

    SPANK!

    ;):D Hope yer arse is a nice rosy shade now!

    mmmmmm...ouchie! I think it may need a wittle wubbbing now...;) but not till I've wubbed yours :)
    Create Good Things........
    Graduate of the School for Sexual Gifted....magna cum loads
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Holey Ghost wrote:

    mmmmmm...ouchie! I think it may need a wittle wubbbing now...;) but not till I've wubbed yours :)

    :p:D

    *wiggles her booty at you* ;)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    depop!!!! Where have you been, Mr. Brightside?? ;):) Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my words.

    Just moved, and then took a feww weeks off. I am considerring Taking 4 months off, and travelling.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
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