Scrape

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited February 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Smelled so good.
Tasted so sweet,
On my tender tongue
Flavoured the senses,
And I chew
And I chew
And I chew,
And chew
And chew
And chew,
And the flavour is...
The flavour is...
Oh, how could it...
But I chew
But I chew
But I chew,
And chew
And chew
And chew,
And...chew
And...chew
And...chew,
And...it...fades...
And I know I should spit it out,
But I chew a little longer
Telling myself I still taste something,
Hoping there's some sweetness left,
Wondering if it was ever, really even there,
Fighting for that last chance
A glimmer of taste sensation,
But just a little tease
As I still try to chew.
Now my jaw is hurting
And I've over-chewed anyway.
So I spit.
And it's all slow-motion,
And I watch you fly,
And I hope you will always fly
Because I have to turn away,
Can't bear to see if you hit the ground,
Or stick to the bottom of anyone else's shoes.
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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Comments

  • Reminds me of a steak I got at Applebee's.

    Never get a steak at Applebee's.

    You score points by mentioning part of a Star Wars character. You could've put in a "bacca" after one of the "chew"s though ;)

    The last line is strong, as are the ones above it.
  • I, myself, have long lasting flavor.

    The subject of this poem sounds like the gum in the middle of a blowpop.

    I agree with Radar in that the last line is glorious. Glory be to you!
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    this is lovely metaphor :D
    It's all yellow.


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