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What's that on your breath?

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited January 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
The smokey skies
lightly danced.
The curtains parted
and smiles appeared on the faces.
Feeling light in my heart, head, feet and step,
I gingerly floated circles around butterflies,
playing chase with the ever changing winds.
Then, light as an eyelash resting on your cheek,
I whispered a sweet caress
and drifted into the next syllable
to escape your lips,
riding the breeze
of your breath.

:)
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Very nice BE!! :)
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Thank you, sweet justam. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • burtschipsburtschips Posts: 734
    yeah BE, that's really fresh and light, and easy.... no contra-flow! I always enjoy the pace and flow of your poems.
    Salut baloo
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    BEutiful!

    most lovely piece, here, m'dear
    among your best, fer sures
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    I just love your poetry BE, it is so light and dreamy... :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    That is very good Being Enlightened, it's one of the best things I have seen on this board.
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    burtschips, multi-talented artiste :), I appreciate that you read enough of my poems to say something so kind. Thank you! :)

    Dear T, merci :), this 'lil BEE intends to keep a buzz-buzz-buzzin'! :D

    PastaNazi :), now I know you've seen lotsa my stuffs so girl, that was the sweetest compliment, thank you so much!!!!! :) Love ya me palli!

    twin1, many many thanks to you! So kind and sweet!!!! :)

    JDE-PJ, WOW :cool:, that's one of the best compliments I have ever recieved!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! *spins and twirls* :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Dreams of RedDreams of Red Posts: 203
    tchaliz wrote:
    "and drifted into the next syllable"

    that's what poetry should feel like
    keep going BEE!

    T


    indeed.

    ...i can't help but feel wonderfully consumed by:
    "I gingerly floated circles around butterflies,
    playing chase with the ever changing winds."

    O to float on such a breeze forever.........
    i'm a thief... and a liar...

    see Ed's church?--he's breathing fire.....
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Dreams of Red wrote:
    indeed.

    ...i can't help but feel wonderfully consumed by:
    "I gingerly floated circles around butterflies,
    playing chase with the ever changing winds."

    O to float on such a breeze forever.........

    :) *sigh* T'would be nice, Dreams of Red. :) I'm glad you feel wonderful whilst being consumed *takes a bite* ;):D.
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    I gingerly floated circles around butterflies,
    playing chase with the ever changing winds.

    this is a nice whimsical piece. very cool. this little two line section is awesome.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    trappedinmyradio wrote:
    this is a nice whimsical piece. very cool. this little two line section is awesome.

    :):) Much appreciated, trapped. I was hoping it had a nice airy feel to it and that it was easy for everybody to get a visual. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    :):) Much appreciated, trapped. I was hoping it had a nice airy feel to it and that it was easy for everybody to get a visual. :)

    well, you achieved that one.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    trappedinmyradio wrote:
    well, you achieved that one.

    :) YIPEEEE!!! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    What can I say that hasn't been said? I actually had no idea you had that in you, BE. That poem is major kick-ass. That's like canon material, totally century-spanning stuff. I take off my hat and bow.
    .........................................................................
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    grooveamatic wrote:
    What can I say that hasn't been said? I actually had no idea you had that in you, BE. That poem is major kick-ass. That's like canon material, totally century-spanning stuff. I take off my hat and bow.

    *big blushes* :):) Sometimes I even surprise myself. So very kind of you, groovy. Thank you bunches! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    uber BE

    uber
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    depopulationINC wrote:
    uber BE

    uber

    :) uber-kind of you to say so, depoppers. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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