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Death Boy

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited March 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Dusty as a sand snake,
you slither
leaving a trail
of dust, blood and bones,
a graveyard storm.
You shove fists
of thunder and
lightening bolts
down the throats
of anyone in your way.
Bone white.
Devil smile.
Devil's child?!
You used to hear your sister
~~panting~~
in the room next to yours
and stroke to the rythym
of a witch doctor's drum,
entranced, enchanted,
~~drifting, drifting~~
literally dying to get inside.
*knock, knock, knock*
"Tommy?"
It's her!
He stares at the closed door
conjuring her beautiful face,
he looks like a wild dog
staring down the
grill of a MAC truck.
"Tommy?
Tommy?
TOMMY?"
^Call my name again.^, he thinks.
"Tommy? Mommy's praying again.
She's been worried 'bout you.
Frankly, I am too.
Tommy?"
^Mmm, that's it.^, he grins to himself.
"Are you okay, Tommy?
Look, let me in, please."
^Oh, let you in!! That's rich!
All I want is to be let in, bitch^,
he scornfully scowls at the door.
"Just a minute, sis, I'm okay", he lies,
finishing with a wipe of his hand,
a straightening of his clothes,
and returning his face
to the facade of a kind smile.
He opens the door and
she embraces him,
tears framing her face.
He returns her embrace,
as the burning fires
of hell roil inside him.
He grits his teeeth
and smells her strawberry hair.
"Jeez, Tommy!
What's gotten into you?
You're all sweaty.
Are you sure you're okay?
Maybe you should just lie down...
~~drifting, drifting~~
You smile the Death Boy smile,
Tommy boy.
With your tombstone mind
and your brimstone style,
you smile,
because home's just another mile...
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Creepy stuff BE.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    twin2 wrote:
    Creepy stuff BE.

    :) Hey twin2! Yes, it is creepy but so was the novel that inspired it. I just love dark and creepy stuff. I'm one of those knobs who will watch any damned horror movie, no matter how low rate it is. :D Love B movies! So, once in awhile, the mood strikes me and I come up with a creepy poem.

    So, I'm glad it creeped you out! Means it's doing it's job! Thanks for the read and comment, sweetie! Sorry if it's not your thing. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    That's ok BE. I used to watch all of them. Once in a great while I watch one. I usually only get to watch toddler cartoons anymore. Cute though. Dora taught my 4 year olds how to count to ten in Spanish. I like how some of the little kid shows are more educational nowadays vs. what I grew up with. The Road Runner was cool when I was growing up, but I must say I feel more comfortable with my kids learning how to count to ten in Spanish. Watching the road runner fall off a cliff on regular basis probably wasn't the best thing for my brain.
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    oh BE.
    creepy indeed. but I love it! :)

    I'm not the kind of person who'd write creepy stuff but I do occasionally enjoy reading some.
    the first time I started reading this I didn't have the time to finish it and I was almost freaking out about it.
    I can never, I mean never leave something creepy like this unfinished.
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    very visual writing there Being Enlightened, a wee bit dark, but I like that sometimes.




    good stuff.
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    howdy j :D
  • Mystique420Mystique420 Posts: 338
    heya BE ;)

    i was caught up in that one... wow... pretty intense stuff... looks like Clive Barker is as big an influence for u as is for me ;)
    "To live,.... love,..... there's a song to be sung,....
    'cause we may not be the Young Ones,..."

    --first u sow the seed-- nature grows the seed-- then we eat the seed-- ;) nah,... we smoke it!
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    IMO-this is one of the best I've read on here BE. Great work, thanks for sharing!!
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    I felt like I was watching a scary movie when I read it. Good read. I use to love scary movies. I still like them but not like I did when I was younger. I grew up on Vincent Price movies which the kids today laugh at. creepy stuff indeed... :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    great picture painted
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    twin2, I have yet to grow up. :D I still watch cheesy horror flicks and cartoons, only I watch the likes of The Simpsons, Family Guy, South Park and those old Looney Toons, when I can...oh man, maybe that's what's wrong with my brain!!!!!!! :D Never was a fan of the Road Runner, I always wanted to see Wile E. Coyote (genius ;) ), take that bugger down! :p

    JDE-PJ! :) I haven't seen your handle around in awhile. Thank you so much for reading and for your kind comment! :)

    Mystique420!!! Good eye!!! :D I'm so glad you're familiar with my muse on this one. I found "The Great And Secret Show" to be a very enjoyable read, myself. And Clive is truly amazing, IMO. Not only in his writings but have you seen any of his artwork? I bought his erotic calendar for this year. It's very, ummm, fallic but I think it's cool. :p

    {{{coach}}}, you're a doll!!! :) Thank you SO much!! *blushes* I tend to prefer my creepy stuff even though it's not for most.

    :D twin1! Glad you liked and that you felt you were watching a scary movie. That's precisely what I was going for! :) Vincent Price was the Prince of Darkness!!!! :D

    depopulous, merci buckets! :D Ooo, if I had the talent to get the easel and oils out....this one would make a great painting. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • walkerlastgen1walkerlastgen1 Posts: 155
    Hip-hop, folk narative, folk bluegrass, you name it music could work magic with those lyrics. Lots of tritone resolution would add a creepy psychological punch to that poem.
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
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