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I think I lost my soul in a dream...

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It was a glorious day, I recall.
Misty, crimson skies
burning behind the oddest tree
I ever did see.
It twisted and turned,
and bent and burned,
and you were sitting
beneath it.
There was something in your eyes...
you seemed so alone,
like you had no home,
and you looked at me,
you actually saw me!
I felt a tugging sensation,
a vibration,
that went right through me...
You told me to love,
but when I did,
you looked away.
You told me to accept,
but when our tastes differ,
you called it sacrilige.
You told me to forgive,
but when I asked,
you wouldn't hear me.
You told me of nature,
but where I saw beauty,
you were blinded by abhorration.
You told me to appreciate life,
but where there were trees,
You laid the bricks...
I felt faint
and you caught me,
you got me,
then you smiled
and walked away...

Today I awoke,
tears on the pillow,
and an aching emptiness in my chest.
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    dreams give the purest metaphorical experiences EVER
    end of story

    this one's just awesome, a.p.

    so oddly smiling at tremendous sacrifice


    :)


    i think you were a wood nymph in a few past lives ;)
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    PastaNazi wrote:
    dreams give the purest metaphorical experiences EVER
    end of story

    this one's just awesome, a.p.

    so oddly smiling at tremendous sacrifice


    :)


    i think you were a wood nymph in a few past lives ;)

    Thank you, my friend, you are too kind! :)

    Hee Hee! Look at me! I'm a wood nymph! Watch me as I tickle the trees and tip-toe through the two-lips! :p:D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    COUGH





    these audiences be cob webbed, you know, lol :D
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    i would have woken in tears with the aching as well

    i love how you wrote this
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    ey d'er VR (good stuff up there by miss b.e., fer sure)



    Been missin' you. little one ok?
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Dimetap! :p

    PastaNazi, you know what I do with spiders--I sit down beside 'em and admire thier webs. :) "I'm walking in the spider webs, so leave a message and I'll call you back..." :D

    Violet Ray, thank you so much! :) I read through some of the Atreyu thread(remember that movie "The Neverending Story"--the boy gets locked up in the school or something and reads the story, becomes the story?? That's what the thread title reminded me of. Oooo, the big, cuddly flying dog/dragon, Falcor, was the cutest! :D) when you had posted previously and those lyrics, some of 'em were really good! I didn't know what to say at the time and I wasn't sure there was anything I could say, so, I just didn't say anything. :) I was hoping that you were doing okay though! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • lucialucia Posts: 19
    :) beautifully sad, and beautifully written. nice one!
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Dimetap! :p

    PastaNazi, you know what I do with spiders--I sit down beside 'em and admire thier webs. :) "I'm walking in the spider webs, so leave a message and I'll call you back..." :D

    :)


    definitely got the reggae-ska thing happen'n today, doncha?


    catchy!
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    PastaNazi wrote:
    ey d'er VR (good stuff up there by miss b.e., fer sure)



    Been missin' you. little one ok?


    me too. little one is good, everything turned out ok, thanks.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    hey being enlightened.......when r we all gonna be okay? it's a sad, sweet peom reflecting a crazy, monstrous world and people that are bad.....and I mean that in a bad way.....people are bad and greedy.....and some of us get hurt......?
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Dimetap! :p

    PastaNazi, you know what I do with spiders--I sit down beside 'em and admire thier webs. :) "I'm walking in the spider webs, so leave a message and I'll call you back..." :D

    Violet Ray, thank you so much! :) I read through some of the Atreyu thread(remember that movie "The Neverending Story"--the boy gets locked up in the school or something and reads the story, becomes the story?? That's what the thread title reminded me of. Oooo, the big, cuddly flying dog/dragon, Falcor, was the cutest! :D) when you had posted previously and those lyrics, some of 'em were really good! I didn't know what to say at the time and I wasn't sure there was anything I could say, so, I just didn't say anything. :) I was hoping that you were doing okay though! :)

    BE, thank you so much for your concern...doing ok now. I never saw that movie, btw...i'll have to check it out.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    ISN wrote:
    hey being enlightened.......when r we all gonna be okay? it's a sad, sweet peom reflecting a crazy, monstrous world and people that are bad.....and I mean that in a bad way.....people are bad and greedy.....and some of us get hurt......?

    ain't that the truth
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Ladies, ladies, ladies! :) So nice to see some action here while I was out. :)

    lucia, merci buckets! :) So sweet of you to stop by and say hi. Much appreciated!

    LOL! Yeah, PastaNazi, I was seeing red, yellow and green yesterday but man, the music's SO catcy (shooby :D) and makes me wanna get my groove on. :)

    ISN, I agree, so many greedy f-ers out there...seems it's the want of money (and subsequently power) drives all the good out of some people. It's a shame! Have you seen the back of the Green Disease T-shirt? Now, I don't know exactly what it says but basically it boils down to greed blackening one's soul and it's my most fave tee. :) I just wish that little blurb about the soul blackening was on the front and in BIG, BOLD letters!

    And vibrant, violet, you're welcome. :):) You should rent that movie, especially if you have kids to watch it with, but even if you don't--it's so adorable and I bet you'd just love it! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    'alo, again, VR (fancy meeting you here ;) ) glad lp's good... real glad hugs n' kisses to both of you


    edit: OH... and Neverending Story is a story you both will absolutely LOVE... I say that, drooling, of course... it's utterly fantastic! You gotta get it and settle in with the little one... no phones, no nothing... you guys will love it. Zozo does ;)
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    The imagery is vivid. I can see it all in my mind....

    Great effort with this poem :)
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Nothingbetter wrote:
    The imagery is vivid. I can see it all in my mind....

    Great effort with this poem :)

    :) Thank you for the compliment! Nothingbetter than hearing you say that, Nothingbetter! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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