Holding Hands
Being Enlightened
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I remember how you smiled,
you glowed in your innocence,
sparkling brilliance
and bubblegum kisses.
Your hair gleamed
and your skin shone,
you radiated goodness
and we always enjoyed
eachothers company,
we swam,
we biked,
we baked,
we swung,
we talked,
we laughed,
we bitched,
we cried,
we sneaked,
we peeked,
we laughed,
we learned...
We weren't afraid
of what people might think
when we were holding hands.
you glowed in your innocence,
sparkling brilliance
and bubblegum kisses.
Your hair gleamed
and your skin shone,
you radiated goodness
and we always enjoyed
eachothers company,
we swam,
we biked,
we baked,
we swung,
we talked,
we laughed,
we bitched,
we cried,
we sneaked,
we peeked,
we laughed,
we learned...
We weren't afraid
of what people might think
when we were holding hands.
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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very nice work!
i'm glad you avoided the cliched
we laughed
we cried
together
he had a voice that was strong and loud and
i swallowed his facade cos i'm so
eager to identify with
someone above the crowd
someone who seemed to feel the same
someone prepared to lead the way
You know, I purposely avoided the "we laughed, we cried" together thing! I still think they're a little to close together but that's okay.
Thanks, El K!
i mean i'm glad you didn't put them in exact order, i didn't think it was a problem where they were in your piece.
he had a voice that was strong and loud and
i swallowed his facade cos i'm so
eager to identify with
someone above the crowd
someone who seemed to feel the same
someone prepared to lead the way
Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth.
-Oscar Wilde