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Peppermint Kisses

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited February 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Your shoulders are so very cold,
like an icy chain-link fence.
SO COLD!
my tongue sticks
and I can only chew my words.
The winter moon
beams a small window of hope
in my heart;
that if I were to touch your hands,
the same cold that inhabits your shoulders
would burn right through my very core,
and French-kiss my soul.
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    and French-kiss my soul.

    I'm so in love with this line!!! :)

    very good job, again, BE!!! :)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Thank you, eMMI-lou! :) I love that line too--I've actually used it before and sometimes, it just finds its way into my mind and I have to put it to page. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Thank you, eMMI-lou! :) I love that line too--I've actually used it before and sometimes, it just finds its way into my mind and I have to put it to page. :)

    yeah, I do remember seeing it before. :) loved it then too. :)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    eMMI wrote:
    yeah, I do remember seeing it before. :) loved it then too. :)

    (stupid no-editing thing!!)

    aww, BE, eMMI-lou. :o:D
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    like Ferlinghetti's "blind breasts"...

    my knives and fruit, lol...

    I sometimes wonder if we don't keep using these lines in an attempt to say perfectly what it is we see or feel.

    nice one, love
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    :) {{{{eMMI-lou}}}} (a hug pour vous) :)

    Ya know, PN, I think you're right! Some lines or phrases are just so perfect that you easily remeber them. The temptation to reuse them is just too great because there really is no other way to say it that would express what you're feeling as perfectly as that particular line or phrase. :)

    Thanks for reading ladies! :) Hee Hee! Pasta, "knives and fruit"---for some reason I'm thinking "tornado juice"... :p:p;)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    tornado juice
    cess in excess
    do not fall in...

    to think i was fucking snorkeling in that shit, holy fu....

    thinking about that is like remembering a horror flick
    (that i starred in)

    hurts
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    :) {{{{eMMI-lou}}}} (a hug pour vous) :)

    aww. :) BE, you're so nice!
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    eMMI wrote:
    aww. :) BE, you're so nice!

    Thanks doll, you're as sweet as sugar yourself. :) It's easy to be nice to nice folks and it just feels so good and so right to share smiles and kindness. :o
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Thanks doll, you're as sweet as sugar yourself. :) It's easy to be nice to nice folks and it just feels so good and so right to share smiles and kindness. :o

    thanks. :) I know exactly what you mean. nothing beats kindness!
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    PastaNazi wrote:
    tornado juice
    cess in excess
    do not fall in...

    to think i was fucking snorkeling in that shit, holy fu....

    thinking about that is like remembering a horror flick
    (that i starred in)

    hurts

    :( :( Sorry babe! Just glad you're past that crapola now. And I know you're on to much, much better times. Hooray for that!!! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • pinonpinon Posts: 427
    Like it a lot.....good vivid imagery :) Can really feel it.
    Life is too serious to be taken seriously
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Aww, thanks, pinon! So nice of you to have a read and leave me some kind words. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    The winter moon
    beams a small window of hope
    in my heart;

    These are my favourit lines of the poem. So often I look up at the moon and realize there's so much more for me to look forward to in life.

    Well it seems so real I can see it
    And it seems so real I can feel it
    And it seems so real I can taste it
    And it seems so real I can hear it
    So why can’t I touch it?

    Thanks for sharing :)
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    ever read a phrase or stanza and you could just jump out of your skin wishing that you'd had the heart/mind to have come up with it yourself?

    always happens when i read my beloved be.

    dayum baybeeeee
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    coachchris wrote:
    These are my favourit lines of the poem. So often I look up at the moon and realize there's so much more for me to look forward to in life.

    Well it seems so real I can see it
    And it seems so real I can feel it
    And it seems so real I can taste it
    And it seems so real I can hear it
    So why can’t I touch it?

    Thanks for sharing :)

    "When the moon hits your eye like a big pizza pie, that's amore...." :p Yeah, I love gazing at the moon too, definitely makes you realize there's a whole lot out there to discover! :) Oooo, and the Buzzcocks lyrics there, mmm, I like that song!! Thanks, coach! :D
    coleen wrote:
    ever read a phrase or stanza and you could just jump out of your skin wishing that you'd had the heart/mind to have come up with it yourself?

    always happens when i read my beloved be.

    dayum baybeeeee

    :o Aww shucks, coleeny beany...I'm truly flattered because I think that although you second guess your writing, it's very lovely and really, I wish I could capture moments, feelings...as eloquently as yourself. :) You really need to keep up with your writing, even if you don't share here, don't let that light grow dim--keep it burning bright!!! I think it's a real damn shame if you let it rust. *smoochers for yooooouuuuu* :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    This is really good BE, I just love the way you word things... :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
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