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Alien?

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Do you ever feel like a stranger
inside your own head?

Overturning stones
best dressed in moss,
and absolutely dreading the inevitable cross?

Do you ever feel like liquid
inside your soft flesh?

Sliding around
in your sensuous skin,
reliving dreams and long forgotten sins?

Do you ever feel like an alien
inside your thick marrow?

Drifting along
in newly formed bones,
feeling awkward and afriad of your home?

Step outside yourself a moment, you're not so alone!

:)
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    quo animo?
    squid lickers
    quid pro quo
    shit kickers


    :)



    lu
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I'll kick the shit but there's no way I'm licking squid! ;):p

    lub

    a

    dubs
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    I'll kick the shit but there's no way I'm licking squid! ;):p

    lub

    a

    dubs


    calamari
    oh, mon chari?


    lol

    ACK

    scoobie
    doobie
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    PastaNazi wrote:
    calamari
    oh, mon chari?


    lol

    ACK

    scoobie
    doobie

    :D Oh, mais oui, mon petit chou, calamari! But I don't like the type served as rings, that's the fast food version, IMO. Bleh! Always disappointing. The calamari that comes with the heads and the tentacles, served with tzatziki, NOW THAT'S THE SHIT! :D Love it! Still won't lick it but love it! :) I'm more of a gobbler. LOL! ;)

    Hee Hee! Hmmm, I could go a scoobie snack right about now....have to wait until the work day's done for that, however. :o
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    :o


    indeed...

    no stokie stogers on co time
    fuckers :D


    i like calmad, italiano... mmmm squid
  • JRobertoJRoberto Posts: 24
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Do you ever feel like a stranger
    inside your own head?

    Overturning stones
    best dressed in moss,
    and absolutely dreading the inevitable cross?

    Do you ever feel like liquid
    inside your soft flesh?

    Sliding around
    in your sensuous skin,
    reliving dreams and long forgotten sins?

    Do you ever feel like an alien
    inside your thick marrow?

    Drifting along
    in newly formed bones,
    feeling awkward and afriad of your home?

    Step outside yourself a moment, you're not so alone!

    :)

    Excellent use of image, made me feel it.
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    best dressed in moss

    Bravo

    There's plenty of great images in this one
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    I'll kick the shit but there's no way I'm licking squid! ;):p

    lub

    a

    dubs
    Havent you eaver eaten Calamari,BE?;)
    love ya girlie....:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    JRoberto, that the images made you feel, well, kind sir, that's the highest compliment and is what I hope to accomplish in all my writings. :)

    EvilToasterElf! :) I'm so glad you liked my mossy line, I was quite fond of that one as well. Thank you so much!

    And last, but certainly not in the least bit, least, Ali-bali!!! :D Girl, I have eaten calamari! (see above comments ;) ) I just don't lick it, well, I may be tempted if it was totally coated in tzatziki and dangling in front of my face... but generally, I prefer to munch on it. :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    tchaliz wrote:
    Be you have a nice progression but most of all I LOVE the CONCLUSION !
    T

    Thank you so much, {{T}}! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    I especially like

    "Overturning stones
    best dressed in moss"

    "Drifting along
    in newly formed bones,
    feeling awkward and afriad of your home?"

    I could see the first one and feelo the second one
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Wow! Thanks, pacifier! :) To me, the greatest compliment is to know that someone could feel (or see) my words. Much appreciated!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • burtschipsburtschips Posts: 734
    You're a wise old bird, BE !! 'overturning stones best (left) dressed in moss,' is real expressive, but sometimes isn't it good to see the smooth shiny side too? after time or just in another time?
    Salut baloo
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    burtschips wrote:
    You're a wise old bird, BE !! 'overturning stones best (left) dressed in moss,' is real expressive, but sometimes isn't it good to see the smooth shiny side too? after time or just in another time?

    :D LOL! *hoot, hoot* Why thank you, burtschips! And yes, perhaps seeing the shiny side of some rocks occasionally is a good thing, that is, if they indeed have a shiny side. Some, however, have been turned long ago, have lost all their lustre and are best left dressed in their mossy coverings; that's just my opinion, of course. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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