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Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited March 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
The poetry of her life
does not fill pages,
although maybe it should.
She was,
is,
a simple woman.
A woman who
once had big dreams,
the kind of big dreams
that big cities,
and their bright lights
over-shadow.
She gave too much
of herself,
a buffet,
pay one price
and take
as much as you want,
and they did.
Take and take and take,
and she
gave and gave and gave,
all she possibly could!
Well,
now the table
is looking sparse
and everyone's eyes
are averted
because although
they know it to be true,
they just can't face
the inevitable.
So afraid are they
for themselves,
that they can't even
look in
on an old friend.
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • The poetry of her life
    does not fill pages,
    although maybe it should.

    Well,
    now the table
    is looking sparse
    and everyone's eyes
    are averted
    because although
    they know it to be true,
    they just can't face
    the inevitable.
    .

    very good. this is what i liked the best
    Roskilde
    Astoria
    Barcelona
    Bologna
    Verona
    Milano
    Torino
    Berlin
    Athens
    København
    Nijmegen
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    Nice!!!!!!!
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    very very very very very nice
    i feel like this woman sometimes

    how sad, indeed?
  • sistanumsysistanumsy Posts: 218
    Oh my this is razer sharp it almost bled to read it. To give so freely, kindly, and honestly for nothing is so uncommon and to trash it, foolish. Hear hear I've heard this one before.
    K-The lost will do their best to get home, if they are loved. To our soldiers who have given what they had.
  • pinonpinon Posts: 427
    painfull indeed.....almost made me cry, I can relate to this.

    Great work, BeingE :)
    Life is too serious to be taken seriously
  • jboelhowjboelhow Posts: 170
    Good use of the metaphor: Buffet and Giving/Life. The metaphor allows the reader to see the selfish behavior of the other people, so much so it is tough to read, like sistanumsy mentions.
    Live the life you dream

    "Cause I can't wait to figure out what's wrong with me
    So I can say this is the way I use to be" -- John Mayer
  • Thank you, all of you, for your kind responses. :) This one's about a very special old gal, who, like many women do, basically lived her life for everyone around her--always being the one to make the calls, set up a time and place to meet, remember the birthdays, the anniversaries, the appointments...She worked hard and then worked even harder. All her life she's struggled and yet, still had a smile and a kind word for anyone who crossed her path. And sure she complained, sheesh, we women, sometimes we just gotta get that shit out and tell whoever will listen about it but she was never mean or spiteful with her talk, she just needed to vent and really, who can blame her!

    What bothers me is that she is now in an hour of great need and some of these "friends" of hers can't even take a moment to call or drop by and see her, seeing as she's not mobile and has been staring at the same 4 walls for months on end. They can't even bloody well call??? It's terribly heart breaking to think that she can be so insignificant to them. :(

    This woman should be celebrated for all the smiles and happiness she brought them...they should return the favour now especially because she really needs it most and yet, they don't. Knowing a few of them and actually, I work with the one who brought this particular poem to mind, makes me believe it is a fear of their own immortality that's keeping them from being there. I mean, this lady I work with is over 60 and still shops in the teeny bopper section and has the bleach blonde hair and goes for botox and had a boob job...she's just all about appearances and it's sickening. She knows where her "friend" is at and yet the phone is as silent as stone.

    I'm someone who hates to lose touch with people. I know it's bound to happen but people that I really connect with, I like to know how they are and let them know I care. I can't imagine knowing someone for years and years and then shunning them because things got tough for them and it was hard for me to think about. The thought is sickening and even if you're afraid of the emotions the contact will conjure up, it's no excuse to not call someone. IMO, never, ever forget your friends! :)

    So, again, thank you all for taking the time to read this one! :) Sorry for the ramblin'! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    I thought that I may have known who this was about. I hope nobody is seeing me sob here at my desk.
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • even flow? wrote:
    I thought that I may have known who this was about. I hope nobody is seeing me sob here at my desk.

    GAWD, I know!!!!!!!!!! I sit here sometimes and I just well right up after reading some of what people post. I hope nobody notices my tears or I scoot to the bathroom if I think they're going to gush out.

    Just getting you back for making me cry at my desk over your offerings this morning, flow?! ;)

    ps. My shoulders are right here waiting for you, should you need them. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • burtschipsburtschips Posts: 734
    You're a good friend BE! The last part is great, from 'well', but I think it could be worse than fear, i think sometimes it's just nothing, just being too interested in your own self.
    Salut baloo
  • Mystique420Mystique420 Posts: 338
    I truly love this work of art and your talent is immense "BE" I love reading your art,... keep em coming
    "To live,.... love,..... there's a song to be sung,....
    'cause we may not be the Young Ones,..."

    --first u sow the seed-- nature grows the seed-- then we eat the seed-- ;) nah,... we smoke it!
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Hi BE. That was truly sad. That lady sounds like she could use some appreciation. There is a lady in town that is like 80 something. She is my Avon lady. She is the sweetest lady. It made me think of her. Sometimes I wonder if she gets treated right by her friends, but I can't imagine her not. She is too sweet and funny to mistreat. She always has something funny to say and she is really fiesty.
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    I mean, this lady I work with is over 60 and still shops in the teeny bopper section and has the bleach blonde hair and goes for botox and had a boob job...she's just all about appearances and it's sickening.

    I feel sorry for people like this. They must feel horrible all of the time.

    I like to help people out when I can. It makes me feel good to see someone be happier because of me. BUt I hate it when people abuse this and just take and take with no thought of what it is doing to the person who is helping them. There is someone in my life like this right now and it is so draining on me and my partner. We try not to be involved with them anymore and try to no when what they ask of us is inconvient to us, but it is difficult. When they approach us it feels so bad not to help but also we just feel trapped in this situation.
  • burtschips, you know what? I think you're right and man, is that ever sad! Just nothing......... :(

    Mystique420, WOW, thank you! So kind of you and I'll try to keep them trickling in. :)

    twin2, like you, I often read other's poetry and think of someone I know. I'm glad you could connect it to someone and I hope your sweet Avon lady never has to endure anything like my special gal!!! :) I should say that many of her friends have either already passed and the real good ones that are still kicking, do call. It's just that many of the ladies that she worked with and did so much for and thought were her real freinds, well, you know. :( Jerks!

    I'm with ya, pacifier! I like to help people out and make them smile too! :) They feel good, I feel good. But just as the situation you're describing, some people just take advantage of your kindness!! And being kind, we feel mean if we put our foot down and say, "No". Sheesh, yeah, that trapped feeling is tough and maybe it's due in part to being so kind but I think maybe, at least in my case, it's also because I have the backbone of a jellyfish! :)

    If I say "no" to someone or am firm with them, I end up over-analyzing and wondering if they're upset and often times I'm on the verge of apologizing or just doing what they want even though I know I shouldn't! :D But I'm learning to get comfortable with being assertive. You can say "no" and still be nice about it. :) It's good to say "no" sometimes becasue then we can be nice and not get taken advantage of. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    This is sad...good read...I feel for her, makes me want to give her a hug...I use to be a people pleaser and not able to say no to anyone but it messes you up inside after awhile. Communication, in an assertive way, is best for all involved if you can do it. Takes some practice though. :):)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • spictubulspular BE
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • memememe Posts: 4,695
    Beautiful, I had missed it :)
    ... and the will to show I will always be better than before.
  • eddies grrleddies grrl Posts: 509
    this poem has real feeling... i like it alot. :)
    Life is the riddle
    Of which we're caught in the middle.
    A couple of lucky ones
    Tangled up in too much love
    ~cowboy junkies
  • twin1, depop, meme, eddie's grrl---:) Thank you all so much! {{{HUGS}}} :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    Be nice to the mystery lady of your poem tonight. :) I hope she enjoys your and the other three bears company. Light that face up!!!!
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • KovoKovo Posts: 255
    Amazing. :D
    I shouldn't have to fight a battle I'll never win, just to lose those I've never had.
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    Bump!!!!!!
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    Great bump! I somehow missed this one when it was first written. Made me remember why BE is one of my fav's on here ;)
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
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