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Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited January 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I found myself lost in translation,
can't change the station,
it all sounds like Greek to me
and I'm not even sitting in Aliki boat!
HA! HA! That's an inside joke,
I guess it's outside now,
like my skin,
for all to scrutinize,
judge and criticize...
I wish I had pretty shoes
'cause my glance often finds the street.
I find lots of spare change, mind you
and I spin words
into something resembling poetry,
it feels like poetry.
It drips from my pen
like the sweet, soulful
sounds of jazz from the radio...
I want to haunt you,
I want you to see me shrouded,
look at me hazy and clouded,
like I'm in a dream,
like I am the dream
that you'd keep dreaming,
like the light
at the
end.
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    This is certainly nice enough to save!
    I like it. :)
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  • AbookamongstthemanyAbookamongstthemany Posts: 8,209
    ooooh, this one is simply outstanding! :)
    If you want to tell people the truth, make them laugh, otherwise they'll kill you.

    Man is least himself when he talks in his own person. Give him a mask, and he will tell you the truth.
    -Oscar Wilde
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    most excellent b e!!
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • burtschipsburtschips Posts: 734
    I like the style and the feeling and the humour and the tempo and that it feels lively. I think you controlled the pace real well.
    Salut baloo
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    burtschips wrote:
    I like the style and the feeling and the humour and the tempo and that it feels lively. I think you controlled the pace real well.

    I second that thought! Very nice BE! Smooothh. :):)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    great poem~we can be lost together~loved the ending~
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    being enlightened...always what i need i find hiding somewhere in your heart and mind, your soul singing out in words my heart waits to hear. your poems are an inspiration...celebration...and i am enlightened.
  • trinityelizatrinityeliza Posts: 426
    that was SWEET!!! i really liked it.
    Put me in coach...I'm ready to
    Fuck up...the USA...
    Look at me...I can rig...
    The presidency!!!!
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    " I want to haunt you,
    I want you to see me shrouded,
    look at me hazy and clouded,
    like I'm in a dream,
    like I am the dream
    that you'd keep dreaming,
    like the light
    at the
    end. "

    thank you for this most excellent poetry :)
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    *blushes* :) Thank you, each and every one of you! :) Happy 2006! Wow, there's a whole bunch of new threads to read today. YAY!!!!!!!! :D I love seeing everybody's creative juices flowing. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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