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Hey! ISN sent me a new poem to share with you guys

Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
edited September 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
she fell in love with him

we met at a party
we were both drunk
I didn't really remember
she called me the next day
I said yeah sure I'll meet ya

we went out for dinner
I got plastered
I puked in the car park
she wiped my tie with her scarf
I said hey sweetheart
don't mess up your scarf

we went to the movies
and had a few drinks
I abused her
I said she was worthless
she cried and said
I love you

we got married
at that point I could hardly
make it to work
I drank every night till past three
she said she loved the real me
what a joke

I hit her around
by mistake sometimes when I was wasted
she loved the smell of my clothes
and the way my hair shone
she said

she loved me
but I didn't love myself
she loved me
enough to die for me

I drank two bottles of bourbon
and she asked me to help with the kids
I pummelled her until she was motionless and then I went to bed

she said she loved me
now she's dead
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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Comments

  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Miss you around here, ISN! :) I thought this one was very sad, my friend. I'm just glad you're still writing! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Empathetic use of the first person.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    However, Cath's sense of moral irony prevails. But then, she does have a degree in Lit, and more than a clue about writing.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    However, Cath's sense of moral irony prevails. But then, she does have a degree in Lit, and more than a clue about writing.

    :) Damn straight! She's a smart cookie, that Cath. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    WOW, great one ISN. I have always loved your writing. I actually read a lot of your work before I started posting...and This is now my favorite. AMAZING

    you should submit it somewhre.


    later inverted one.
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
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