my experience with love (feedback)

GivenToPimpGivenToPimp Posts: 19
SUNDAY, AUGUST 17, 2003
i walk up to the door & hear your voice
everything settles, i pull the door open
my eyes searching, resting upon your freckled face
i say hello, walk to you, take your hand
time stands still, i sit by you, and gaze
i'm lost in a trance, i look at you
both hands now, lost in a web of fingers
we look again and just smile, no words needed
theres only one thing i want to say to you
i hesitate, fearing release and loss, holding on
finally i whisper it, to your ear, thru your hair
against my lips, soft and soothing,
room goes quiet, we're alone. i say it.
i love you. my heart races waiting for a reaction,
better than i could have hoped for
your head turns, a quick glance, lips come to my ear
i love you too. i hold you tighter
thats all i can think to do, you get comfortable in my arms
my heart gets comfortable with yours
we're now lost in twisted arms wrapped and legs held, you exhale,
the sweetest breeze, i kiss all of you and you hold me
even tighter, so tight i become a part of you. its time to go,
everyone waves goodbye. i stand and hold you
for what feels like forever and a second at the same time.
you say it again and i know it's true
i love you too. thank you.
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  • I saw this before on the old board, very nice. I think a lot of us can relate to it, thanks for sharing.
    'Fox hunting is barbaric, the people who do it are a bunch of snobby tories with stupid posh accents. Oh damn, i didn't say that - damn, what a giveaway...'
  • Originally posted by nocode198
    I saw this before on the old board, very nice. I think a lot of us can relate to it, thanks for sharing.
    yeah...i wanted to post it again cause i was thinking about sharing it with my grilfriend and i wanted alot of feedback...thanks.
  • that's a hot one
    convicted
  • A Request

    Indulge me a moment while I sit by your side.

    Without a glimps of your face, my heart cannot rest,
    and my work becomes drudgery in an endless sea of toil.
    Today summer came to my window, sighing and
    murmuring, and the bees played like minstrels at the
    court of flowery groves.

    Now we'll sit quietly, each to each,
    and sing out our dedication to life
    in silent and ever-flowing ease.

    RT




    All Is Still

    All at once the sight of you!
    Your gaze, full of light
    Makes everything still-
    Everything still

    The milk spills on the ground
    My parents and brothers cry Stop!
    "Pluck him from your heart," they say.
    "Or your way is lost."

    Mira says, "Who of you but him
    Can really see into the dark well of my heart?"

    M.



    Blossoming

    Sunlight spreads over a face in the shadows
    Like the flower of truth beginning to unfold

    R.
  • lovin kindlovin kind Posts: 268
    these kind of stories make me feel kind of naked for some reason
    like my eyes could be seen through to the mind and the waves
    can be read

    makes me feel like a young boy

    may god bless your beautiful soul
    thanks to everyone who can read what i write without having to say something mean
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    SUNDAY, AUGUST 17, 2003
    i walk up to the door & hear your voice
    everything settles, i pull the door open
    my eyes searching, resting upon your freckled face
    i say hello, walk to you, take your hand
    time stands still, i sit by you, and gaze
    i'm lost in a trance, i look at you
    both hands now, lost in a web of fingers
    we look again and just smile, no words needed
    theres only one thing i want to say to you
    i hesitate, fearing release and loss, holding on
    finally i whisper it, to your ear, thru your hair
    against my lips, soft and soothing,
    room goes quiet, we're alone. i say it.
    i love you. my heart races waiting for a reaction,
    better than i could have hoped for
    your head turns, a quick glance, lips come to my ear
    i love you too. i hold you tighter
    thats all i can think to do, you get comfortable in my arms
    my heart gets comfortable with yours
    we're now lost in twisted arms wrapped and legs held, you exhale,
    the sweetest breeze, i kiss all of you and you hold me
    even tighter, so tight i become a part of you. its time to go,
    everyone waves goodbye. i stand and hold you
    for what feels like forever and a second at the same time.
    you say it again and i know it's true
    i love you too. thank you.
    Its a very nice peom to hear...and its equally as nice when its said...or written...I love you too.
    I would frame this poem and hang it close to your heart.
    PS I love you too:)Best said by one who you share that intimacy with though.

    Have a good one....
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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